Writing Feedback / SAT Essay:One Subject or Multiple? [3]

Assignment: Is it better to focus on one subject or multiple.
In modern society, the indispensable discoveries cannot be found by focusing on one subject anymore, but instead the advanced technologies always require different people's focusing on various subjects. Without a doubt, all important discoveries cannot be resulted from centering on one subject.

Isaac Newton, one of the most prominent scientists in human civilization, contributed significantly in modern physics by his discovery of gravity from the famous "falling apple" experience. In his process toward the discovery of gravity, in addition to the extreme talent in physics, Newton created and used a sizable number of mathematical methods, which are still used in today's calculus courses. Had Newton not had the outstanding knowledge of calculus, he would not have been able to solve the problem of the "falling apple" and came up with one of the most influential theories, the gravity.

Observing the modern scientific researches, we are able to find the importance of focusing on multiple subjects. The Large Hardon Collider was perhaps the most renowned scientific projects in year 2008. The Large Hardon Collider, also known as the "god particle" experiment, helped scientists understand the starting point of the universe by studying the tenuous "god particle", the basis of all objects. Although the god particle is tiny, more than three thousand scientists from over the world who study in many different subjects gathered in Switzerland, the location for LHC project, to achieve their common goal. There were not only physicists, but also mathematicians, chemists, and computer programmers. Thus, it is reasonable to believe that the discoveries, especially those in the current world, cannot be done by focusing on one subject.

In conclusion, great works and discoveries always contain various different subjects.

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Writing Feedback / Essay About Malcolm X [3]

Could you please check my sentence structure and grammar? They are two questions about Malcolm X:
1. How did the process by which Malcolm learned to read differ from the typical way people learn to read?
2. Malcolm tells us that he learned to read by teaching himself. What else did he teach himself while he taught himself to read?

1. In general, common people start reading from the comic books, in which they learn the meaning of sentences from pictures and acquire vocabulary. When they go to school, they learn how to read from teachers while they also learn vocabulary from the readings. Unlike common people, Malcolm X learned how to read in prison without any previous knowledge of reading and vocabulary as in the essay, "But every book I picked up had few sentences which didn't contain anywhere from one to nearly all of the words that might as well have been in Chinese." Struggling on the vocabulary, "[Malcolm] saw that the best thing [he] could do was get hold of a dictionary- to study, to learn some words." After the collection of a great number of words, he had no problem understanding books, and thus he began to devour books as possible as he could. In addition to the desire of knowledge, he was also motivated by many erudite people, such as Bimbi and articulate debaters. Perhaps the biggest difference between how Malcolm and common people read is that Malcolm enjoyed reading and he could spend all his time for books, as he said,"Let me tell you something: from then until I left that prison, in every free moment I had, if I was not reading in the library, I was reading on my bunk."

2. In order to be able to read, Malcolm taught himself through the dictionary. He copied all the content from the dictionary, and reviewed them everyday. By doing that, not only had he taught himself the vocabulary, he had also learned how to write fast and accurately. Also, from the readings, he learned the ideas of other people, history, archeology, religion, genetics, and other kinds of knowledge that he couldn't learn from school. From all the knowledge he had taught himself, he was influenced by the history of Africa, the black people in America, and how white people "whiten" the history, which eventually made him a great public speaker as well as a human rights fighter.