hannahphan
Jan 8, 2013
Writing Feedback / What are some causes of stress among young people and How could this be ameliorated? [7]
In modern life,when the standard of living is increasing more and more, people do not need to worry about their phycal lifes too much, so they pay more attention to how to be satisfied and deal with the stress problem. According to psychologists' statistics, the rate of young people who get stressed is growing, especially in developed countries.
In the fact that they interact with technology products such as the laptop, TV, the tablet, ipads, and so on; and they spend too much time on them that causes them to not have time for real communicatin and outdoor activities. For example,they can use computers in order to chat with their friends instead of going out together. When a person does not have interactin with people around him, he can be upset and lonely easily, which causes stress. Another reason is pressure of studying.Normally, a teenager has to spend more than four or five hours at their school and three or four more hours on studying at home per day. That leads to the lack of time for relaxing. In addition, they are under pressure from the exams in school and some of them are scared.
There are some solutions in order to deal with these problem. Parents should take care of theirs children and motivate them join in outdoor activities like: play sport, go to picnic, go out with their friends,travelling and so on, so that they can balance their children's schedules and help them to relax. Moreover, schools should have more classes in real life such as communication skills class, dance class that is useful to develop student's communication, and they have chances to make more interaction with people around them.
Ultimately, I believe this problem will be solved. Modern society will always have its share of stress, but by taking a more enlightened,long-term view of success, parents and schools can reduce the extraordinary amount of pressure that so many young people face.
Thanks everybody for checking and fixing my essay!
In modern life,when the standard of living is increasing more and more, people do not need to worry about their phycal lifes too much, so they pay more attention to how to be satisfied and deal with the stress problem. According to psychologists' statistics, the rate of young people who get stressed is growing, especially in developed countries.
In the fact that they interact with technology products such as the laptop, TV, the tablet, ipads, and so on; and they spend too much time on them that causes them to not have time for real communicatin and outdoor activities. For example,they can use computers in order to chat with their friends instead of going out together. When a person does not have interactin with people around him, he can be upset and lonely easily, which causes stress. Another reason is pressure of studying.Normally, a teenager has to spend more than four or five hours at their school and three or four more hours on studying at home per day. That leads to the lack of time for relaxing. In addition, they are under pressure from the exams in school and some of them are scared.
There are some solutions in order to deal with these problem. Parents should take care of theirs children and motivate them join in outdoor activities like: play sport, go to picnic, go out with their friends,travelling and so on, so that they can balance their children's schedules and help them to relax. Moreover, schools should have more classes in real life such as communication skills class, dance class that is useful to develop student's communication, and they have chances to make more interaction with people around them.
Ultimately, I believe this problem will be solved. Modern society will always have its share of stress, but by taking a more enlightened,long-term view of success, parents and schools can reduce the extraordinary amount of pressure that so many young people face.
Thanks everybody for checking and fixing my essay!