Undergraduate / The most appealing fact about Yale is the eclectic community of students [3]

Could anyone help me out?
I wrote this for the topic 'why yale'
The most appealing fact about Yale is the eclectic community of students. Though I haven't been to the school, through the university's website and view book I have realised that Yale provides the best opportunity to meet new people and experience diverse cultures. Nonetheless, after everything, I need a community where I would easily fit in and be exposed to a miscellany of ideas.

Undergraduate / I never felt so disappointed; My Yale Supplement Essay [3]

Hello Everyone,
Could you please review my essay on this topic for me?
Topic: In this second essay, please reflect on something you would like us to know about you that we might not learn from the rest of your application-or on something that you would like to say more about.

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I had never felt such disappointment in my life! Everyone expected me to end up with all 'As' and go to the best girls' school in Ghana. But I was wrong and they were wrong. The results had just been released and I had seven out of the ten 'As' I needed to gain admission. I wasn't surprised though that even my parents could not break the news to me. 'There is no way I am going to St. Roses', I told my mum but I knew I had very little chance of ever getting into Wesley Girls'.

Soon, I embraced my destiny and decided to attend St. Rose's hoping that I could soon transfer. I wouldn't stay here for more than a term I told myself as I entered the school. Yet, what I thought was my failure was actually a blessing in disguise. I met several people who had the same situation as I had but they were not considering themselves as failures. Settling in school, I realised that this environment was the best for me. Each and every one was given an equal opportunity to bring out her talents and this gave me the opportunity to learn a lot from my peers. Maybe my expectations and that of others were too high but should I be affected by them?

When the term came to an end, I knew had a decision to make. Either I stay at my school or get the transfer. I looked back at the school that gave every student an equal chance to showcase her capabilities and I began to wonder if that wasn't better than the school where everyone wants to come out first. I would gain the admiration of most people if I transferred to Wesley Girls but what about me? Would I find a place to settle in?

No mum! I am staying right here! I made a tough decision that day but I have never regretted. Graduating from St. Rose's after four years in the top one percent of a class of 325 students, I could but only say that I made the best choice.