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falishaa

Dec 10, 2012

Scholarship / I remember that my mom has worked so hard: Personal Statement [8]

thankyou so much... really...

this is my second para:

This condition has made me pushed myself to the limit, to prove to myself that money matters will not be an obstacle for my accomplishment. I participated in Science Olympic in earth-science section. It was actually aimed for science students and I am a social department students which is no longer study about physics, chemicals, etc, but I insist to join, I gathered my courage and register to the selection. I got selected and had to represent my school in regency level. I actually got the difficulties with science lessons during the training,but I could overcome them with some catching up outside the school hours. I won as a top 15 and would be trained for the next level. I got the money from this winning and honestly, it helped me a lot. But I failed to win in province level. This is a precious experience I got in training and the whole competition. It encourages me to achieve more and made me believe with persistence and dedication I can reach the impossible.

thankyou so much for helping, so this is the accomplishment, what should I write in para 3?

falishaa

Dec 10, 2012

Scholarship / I remember that my mom has worked so hard: Personal Statement [8]

In 200 to 300 of your own words, describe personal characteristic and accomplishment that will allow evaluators to form a complete view of you. Include any family or personal circumtances that may have impacted your achievements

falishaa

Dec 9, 2012

Scholarship / I remember that my mom has worked so hard: Personal Statement [8]

I have to make 2 essays:

1. personal traits, activities, achievement, family circumtances, important person
2. aspiration, carreer goals

so I think I write about my passion for pursuing my dreams in essay 2? or what do you think?
Do you think I answered the prompt? Do you have any suggestion to fix my essay?
I am sorry this is my first time making an essay
Thankyou for your help :)

falishaa

Dec 9, 2012

Scholarship / I remember that my mom has worked so hard: Personal Statement [8]

I live with my mom, dad, and my sister. My mom works at Chevron, while my dad is an unemployee. She all alone pays house installment and supports the whole family needs. She once told me, that half of her monthly salary is used to pay off the house installment, so she might can not afford to pay for my living cost in university, but she keep working to fulfill the cost. She really is a hardworking woman , and that is what she always taught me to become.

This condition in my family, actually had formed me into the way I am now, which is a hardworker, optimistic, thankful, and not easily give up person. Whenever I get difficulty in something, I remembered that my mom has worked so hard, so I trust myself that I can follow her as an example and I will not let obstacles overcome myself, and I am being thankful for all the things I have despite the money matters my family are having. Eventhough I have to collect money my own money to buy shoes and clothes, I am enjoying that because it shapes me to become an independent individual.

Also, teenagers in my age tend to spent their time shopping and partying, which I can not afford. So, I prefer to spent most of my time in school's community, such as joining band club as guitar player, and soccer club as defender player and being a secretary in its organizations. I also spent my time participated in several events as a committee, and also winning Science Olympic in regency level. Not only this activities are more meaningful, but here I have developed leadership skills and have learned to interact with a wide variety of people while working with different deskjobs.

essay for educational assistance program (fund scholarship)
please correct my essay. max 300 words thankyou so much