eagles94
Dec 15, 2012
Undergraduate / Hot, mucky, and grimy; Common App short Essay Comments [5]
Sorry i posted the wrong prompt. The actual prompt is
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer).
Also I edited the previous essay after finding some errors and this is the latest one
Hot, mucky, and grimy: these were the thoughts that passed through my head as I paddled down the Potomac river, one of the most polluted rivers in the area, as part of a river clean up organization. I trudged down stream, peering closely at the banks for any floating trash. It was a difficult task which demanded physical and mental strength to power through the currents and withstand the harsh environment.Yet my strength was dwindling and my resolve was weakening. Exhausted and ready to give up, I desperately searched for motivation. Then I thought to my self, "This river serves five million people and is home to millions of animals. How many people can say they positively impacted millions of lives!" I paused and smiled, shaking my head in amazement. "I know I can," and I paddled on.
Sorry i posted the wrong prompt. The actual prompt is
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer).
Also I edited the previous essay after finding some errors and this is the latest one
Hot, mucky, and grimy: these were the thoughts that passed through my head as I paddled down the Potomac river, one of the most polluted rivers in the area, as part of a river clean up organization. I trudged down stream, peering closely at the banks for any floating trash. It was a difficult task which demanded physical and mental strength to power through the currents and withstand the harsh environment.Yet my strength was dwindling and my resolve was weakening. Exhausted and ready to give up, I desperately searched for motivation. Then I thought to my self, "This river serves five million people and is home to millions of animals. How many people can say they positively impacted millions of lives!" I paused and smiled, shaking my head in amazement. "I know I can," and I paddled on.
