jkim147
Jan 1, 2013
Undergraduate / Banking empire; Northwestern University supplement! [5]
At the Weinberg College, I plan to enroll in the MENU program and Northwestern's unique MMSS program to improve and discipline my mathematical skills, allowing me to successfully apply mathematics onto social sciences, thus opening many more career options. Economics has always been at the center of my intellectual expansion. My passion for economics is driven by the ingenious clockwork of fractional reserve banking; in my opinion, this system of banking dominates modern economics. Complement to economics, mathematics is the sword and shield that economics wield. In my free time, I often try to invent more efficient equations or attempt to prove certain conjectures. For example, unsatisfied with Heron's formula, I derived a new equation to calculate the area of any triangle by expanding the Pythagorean Theorem geometrically. Currently, I am working to prove Fermat's Last Theorem with an end in sight; the sheer difficulty brings joy to my intellectual curiosity. Equipped with strong math skills, I plan to pursue one of the Kellogg Certificate Programs in Financial Economics and Managerial Analytics. Doing so, I look forward to meeting Professor Mitchell Petersen and learning about venture capital and company growth. In addition, I plan to participate in the College Fed Challenge as a way to apply my learnings in economics and mathematics into use.
I just rearranged this paragraph to make a better flow to the overall essay. Just a suggestion though
Also, you use "in addition" "doing so" "even more" etc etc at the beginning of a sentence a few times, try to have a better lead in or transition. Using those phrases too many times leads to breaks in your essay's overall flow
From what I read, I would say that this essay shows your personality and ambitions pretty well. Nice essay
At the Weinberg College, I plan to enroll in the MENU program and Northwestern's unique MMSS program to improve and discipline my mathematical skills, allowing me to successfully apply mathematics onto social sciences, thus opening many more career options. Economics has always been at the center of my intellectual expansion. My passion for economics is driven by the ingenious clockwork of fractional reserve banking; in my opinion, this system of banking dominates modern economics. Complement to economics, mathematics is the sword and shield that economics wield. In my free time, I often try to invent more efficient equations or attempt to prove certain conjectures. For example, unsatisfied with Heron's formula, I derived a new equation to calculate the area of any triangle by expanding the Pythagorean Theorem geometrically. Currently, I am working to prove Fermat's Last Theorem with an end in sight; the sheer difficulty brings joy to my intellectual curiosity. Equipped with strong math skills, I plan to pursue one of the Kellogg Certificate Programs in Financial Economics and Managerial Analytics. Doing so, I look forward to meeting Professor Mitchell Petersen and learning about venture capital and company growth. In addition, I plan to participate in the College Fed Challenge as a way to apply my learnings in economics and mathematics into use.
I just rearranged this paragraph to make a better flow to the overall essay. Just a suggestion though
Also, you use "in addition" "doing so" "even more" etc etc at the beginning of a sentence a few times, try to have a better lead in or transition. Using those phrases too many times leads to breaks in your essay's overall flow
From what I read, I would say that this essay shows your personality and ambitions pretty well. Nice essay