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Dec 30, 2012
Undergraduate / Beauty and the sense of community; Why Carleton? [5]
I wrote two passages on this topic and actually quite dissatisfied with both of them.
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Why Carleton? The initial and simplest reason - the campus is too beautiful. When I skimmed the campus photobook on Carleton's website, I was immediately enchanted. The golden autumn, the animate arboretum, the serene lakes... No way! I couldn't help but imagine day and night how my life would be studying in Alice's wonderland.
Wait, there is more! "The sense of community is very noteworthy in Carleton", a senior emphasized. Individualistic and elitist as our society has become, I am desperate for a big warm dynamic family besides academic atmosphere. I always believe it is the environment other than lessons that shapes a person more, and when I found Carleton, I knew I found my Mr. Right.
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Why Carleton? Honestly, I can't give a specific, profound answer.
Carleton is like a first-met guy who I have a crush on but do not know. I cannot help picturing me taking photos of the scenic campus, tossing my first Frisbee to the Bald Spot with my future BFF and doing my first broadcast as a DJ of KRLX-FM 88.1. Mountainous descriptions of small things build a vivid image of Carleton I desperate to experience.
Just give me a chance, and I will prove that we are meant to be together.
Can anyone give some advice and help me improve them?
THX :)
I wrote two passages on this topic and actually quite dissatisfied with both of them.
1
Why Carleton? The initial and simplest reason - the campus is too beautiful. When I skimmed the campus photobook on Carleton's website, I was immediately enchanted. The golden autumn, the animate arboretum, the serene lakes... No way! I couldn't help but imagine day and night how my life would be studying in Alice's wonderland.
Wait, there is more! "The sense of community is very noteworthy in Carleton", a senior emphasized. Individualistic and elitist as our society has become, I am desperate for a big warm dynamic family besides academic atmosphere. I always believe it is the environment other than lessons that shapes a person more, and when I found Carleton, I knew I found my Mr. Right.
2
Why Carleton? Honestly, I can't give a specific, profound answer.
Carleton is like a first-met guy who I have a crush on but do not know. I cannot help picturing me taking photos of the scenic campus, tossing my first Frisbee to the Bald Spot with my future BFF and doing my first broadcast as a DJ of KRLX-FM 88.1. Mountainous descriptions of small things build a vivid image of Carleton I desperate to experience.
Just give me a chance, and I will prove that we are meant to be together.
Can anyone give some advice and help me improve them?
THX :)
