Ataraxia
Feb 15, 2009
Scholarship / Scholarship Personal Statement (my dream of becoming a doctor) [9]
Don't you think that's a bit off-topic? While I do agree that every response to this prompt is going to be similar, I think discussing post-academic plans in such detail is a bit of a stretch. Hopefully this person will help others in need with the same passion no matter which school they attend (assuming receiving this scholarship will aid them in attending a particular school).
Try staying in more well-known territory with this one -- talk about what you do now that you could expand upon if given the chance with this scholarship. Yes, you've accomplished a lot, but how will that help you in the future aside from satisfying your expectance of achieving your goals (essentially what EF_Sean told you)? You might even want to choose new accomplishments that better convey your reason, rather than restating your academic successes.
Use this question as an opportunity to tell them about the kind of physician you will be...
Don't you think that's a bit off-topic? While I do agree that every response to this prompt is going to be similar, I think discussing post-academic plans in such detail is a bit of a stretch. Hopefully this person will help others in need with the same passion no matter which school they attend (assuming receiving this scholarship will aid them in attending a particular school).
Try staying in more well-known territory with this one -- talk about what you do now that you could expand upon if given the chance with this scholarship. Yes, you've accomplished a lot, but how will that help you in the future aside from satisfying your expectance of achieving your goals (essentially what EF_Sean told you)? You might even want to choose new accomplishments that better convey your reason, rather than restating your academic successes.
