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Ashley3291   
Jan 5, 2013
Undergraduate / 'Peer Advocate' - (Applying to Emory and UM as a Transfer Student) [5]

Thank you both! Below is the revised version. It's 993 characters; let me know what you think!

I can't begin to describe the feeling I get when I help a student plan for their future and contribute to their academic success. My goal is to convey the importance of education and show others how to achieve their maximum potential. Peer Advocate is an organization that assists first-year college students in developing the skills necessary for academic success. I looked into joining Peer Advocate because I wanted to share advice and my motivation for pursuing a college degree. One of the most rewarding aspects of this organization, to me, is being able to familiarize students with college resources, as it is imperative to college success. At the end of the fall semester, I was chosen to become a lead advocate for next semester, in which I will be leading meetings and monitoring other advocates. This organization has helped me grow as an inspirational leader for others. I intend to use the skills that I've learned from this experience to continue helping students in the future.
Ashley3291   
Jan 1, 2013
Undergraduate / 'Peer Advocate' - (Applying to Emory and UM as a Transfer Student) [5]

Topic: Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

I can't begin to describe the feeling I get when helping a student plan for their future and contributing to their academic success. Conveying the importance of education and achieving one's maximum potential has become a part of my everyday life. Peer Advocate is an organization that assists first-year college students in developing the skills necessary for academic success. Each advocate is assigned mentees and it is the advocate's responsibility to assist them in educational planning and be a source of motivation for them. I looked into joining Peer Advocate because I wanted to share advice and my motivation for pursuing a college degree with other students. One of the most important aspects of this organization, to me, is being able to familiarize students with college resources. I believe that knowing where to find information and receive help is imperative to success in college. At the end of the fall semester, I was chosen by the director to become a lead advocate for next semester. They have the added responsibilities of leading bi-weekly meetings and monitoring other advocates, as well as mentees. This organization, along with the required leadership class that went along with it, has helped me grow as an inspirational leader for others. Being a part of this organization has made this past semester very rewarding and I'm excited to see what next semester has in store for me.

I need to cut out some things because I'm 407 characters over the limit. Also, I feel like it's not very interesting. Any input will be very much appreciated. Thank you!
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