S_Choi1
Jan 21, 2013
Undergraduate / "SUNGOWN" - EXCHANGE STUDENT ; Common App [2]
"Sungwon Sungwon" My attention was following a voice and it changed me into the Columbus who was voyaging to the unfamiliar place .Interestingly, contradict to Columbus amazing founding the students who come to America has a simple reason. When I asked to exchange students about the reason why you came to United States. Most of them responded with united answer, "I came here for improving my English or I want to experience American cultures". Of course, it is wonderful chance to learn it. However, my goal was not as simple as the other students were because I have both a clear motivation and initiative.
Everybody has been heard Talmud at least one time which contains the opinions of thousands of rabbis on a variety of subjects including law, ethics, philosophy, customs, history, theology and lore. Surprisingly, this book has involved considerably in my life and gave me a strong motivation to be an exchange student. When I was in Elementary and Middle school, this story just gave me a motivation to build up knowledge, because the property can be gone anytime but knowledge can not be taken from anybody. Although this thinking was unsophisticated, it was criterion for me to compare with the others who just studying without no motivation.
Furthermore, while I was in high school, my motivation being more clearly. In the story of Talmud, three people in a ship were sailing for a long journey, two of them were rich and one was a just scholar. Suddenly, they counted with high surging and the ship is wretched. Moreover, they lost everything .In the meantime, Rabbis who has a lot of acquaintance can sustain himself and rests of them in the ship were bagging the money for living. At this point, I equalized the ship and country and figured it out that if I can gain the skill that the other people can not . In addition, the world being a globalization English became a necessity for nowadays. As a result, I decided that being an exchange student is good chance to realize my belief.
Next is initiative dictionary defines initiative as "the power ability, or instinct to begin or to follow through energetically with a plan or task. Many people will know the importance of this must have trait. My father always emphasize this trait and he describe it can to be the most powerful skill tool for bridging the chasm between the intelligent and average student. Because an initiative mind set can challenge myself to be an exchange student and after that I can have sweet fruit for result. Foreign exchange student approach to my life with an entirely new perspective. These newly discovered characteristics will help me in all aspects of my life as I continue to grow and face more challenges
Please give me a recommandation about grammar and the smoothness of story
And i am not sure which number should i indicate it for an essay topic
1.Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
2.Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you.
3.Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.
4.Describe a character in fiction, a historical figure, or a creative work (as in art, music, science, etc.) that has had an influence on you, and explain that influence.
5.A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community, or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.
"Sungwon Sungwon" My attention was following a voice and it changed me into the Columbus who was voyaging to the unfamiliar place .Interestingly, contradict to Columbus amazing founding the students who come to America has a simple reason. When I asked to exchange students about the reason why you came to United States. Most of them responded with united answer, "I came here for improving my English or I want to experience American cultures". Of course, it is wonderful chance to learn it. However, my goal was not as simple as the other students were because I have both a clear motivation and initiative.
Everybody has been heard Talmud at least one time which contains the opinions of thousands of rabbis on a variety of subjects including law, ethics, philosophy, customs, history, theology and lore. Surprisingly, this book has involved considerably in my life and gave me a strong motivation to be an exchange student. When I was in Elementary and Middle school, this story just gave me a motivation to build up knowledge, because the property can be gone anytime but knowledge can not be taken from anybody. Although this thinking was unsophisticated, it was criterion for me to compare with the others who just studying without no motivation.
Furthermore, while I was in high school, my motivation being more clearly. In the story of Talmud, three people in a ship were sailing for a long journey, two of them were rich and one was a just scholar. Suddenly, they counted with high surging and the ship is wretched. Moreover, they lost everything .In the meantime, Rabbis who has a lot of acquaintance can sustain himself and rests of them in the ship were bagging the money for living. At this point, I equalized the ship and country and figured it out that if I can gain the skill that the other people can not . In addition, the world being a globalization English became a necessity for nowadays. As a result, I decided that being an exchange student is good chance to realize my belief.
Next is initiative dictionary defines initiative as "the power ability, or instinct to begin or to follow through energetically with a plan or task. Many people will know the importance of this must have trait. My father always emphasize this trait and he describe it can to be the most powerful skill tool for bridging the chasm between the intelligent and average student. Because an initiative mind set can challenge myself to be an exchange student and after that I can have sweet fruit for result. Foreign exchange student approach to my life with an entirely new perspective. These newly discovered characteristics will help me in all aspects of my life as I continue to grow and face more challenges
Please give me a recommandation about grammar and the smoothness of story
And i am not sure which number should i indicate it for an essay topic
1.Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
2.Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you.
3.Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.
4.Describe a character in fiction, a historical figure, or a creative work (as in art, music, science, etc.) that has had an influence on you, and explain that influence.
5.A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community, or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.
