Scholarship / Explain why you feel you merit consideration as an applicant for an award or scholarship [11]

ya this is better than your first one... but i feel still a lot more improvement to ur essay needs to be done for you to get an scholarship

Essays / How to Start an Essay (with the question?) [12]

thanks a lot mustafa

Essays / How to Start an Essay (with the question?) [12]

my essay topic is about women takin career breaks....my first line is the topic itself ...will that sound good