Scholarship / Life time experience with a college life; Summer School Scholarship [14]

Don't waste your words writing about sense of responsibility just write that 'i will learn to be independent'.Tell them you have a extra ordinary dream of becoming blah blah and how this school will help you follow your dream.

As i told you have to come up with something that only this school can give you and no other school can give you.So that they get to know how much important it is for you to attend this summer school.

And the last thing you have to be more specific,don't just write that it will give me science knowledge,be more specific.Also you can write that 'i have participated in many events in school and outside the school and i am known as a talented guy, now i want to work at a greater level and prove myself as a talented one'.

Lastly write something special about this summer school that is the best about them and no other school has that thing.
Good luck

Scholarship / Life time experience with a college life; Summer School Scholarship [14]

First of all your grammar is weak.Second of all you are telling them that you will learn maths and physics.That is not good.you can learn maths and physics every where,you have to tell them what kind of special thing they have which you cant get anywhere else.how ever you can learn maths and physics even from a book,you don't need to go to summer school all the way just to learn maths and physics.also you are talking about science labs,you are not going to summer school to do experiments in their science labs,you are going to participate in the special events they have.also you are saying that your school topics are boring.NO don't give them the image that you don't like your school,instead tell them that you are the best in your school and like participating and working for your school.

"Overall this will also provide me with a lifetime experience of a college life". This is the only sentence in your essay i will appreciate.

You have to explain to them why going to that summer school is going to change your life..tell them why is it so important for you and what can you learn there that you cant learn anywhere else.

Don't worry just improve it and Good luck.