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Feb 26, 2013
Undergraduate / "It's never too late to change" ; TRANSFER -UTexas at Austin- SOP [9]

Thank you dumi, I need to change my intro and my conclusion.

Is there anything I should change in my second and third paragraph?

I plan on adding more personal aspects that strengthened my drive to major in economics such as attending Larry Summer's (prestigious economist) economics lecture and my present microeconomics course.
joed94   
Feb 24, 2013
Undergraduate / "It's never too late to change" ; TRANSFER -UTexas at Austin- SOP [9]

Lol everyone who read this essay thinks I went to Riddle (I guess I have to make it clear that I didn't). I attended a community college in Texas and am planning to transfer for the fall semester. I took an economics course senior year which was the initial incentive that made me want to major in it. I took another economics course at the CC and attended a lecture by Larry Summers (prestigious economist) which further cemented my choice to change majors (which I should incorporate in my essay).

Thanks for your response! I'll be sure to look at your essay for your Brown transfer. Good luck!
joed94   
Feb 18, 2013
Undergraduate / "It's never too late to change" ; TRANSFER -UTexas at Austin- SOP [9]

Hello everyone I need some critique on my statement of purpose essay (still unfinished). Your feedback is very important to me so feel free to say whatever necessary.

Prompt:

Statement of Purpose

Here's what I have so far:

It's a common expression for one to say "it's never too late to change." It is by human nature to change so that one can determine their path in life. A person's path in life is never predetermined though, it is chosen by the will to be great in a life where discovery is everlasting. Through self-discovery comes this change everyone refers to, and this is a revolution I have partaken in. Senior year of high school I decided to devote myself to the field of economics because this is where I knew my greatness lied. Deciding to turn to a degree in economics was a change for the better as it would provide me with the necessary skills to understand the system we know as this world and to better it.

Senior year of high school: the year everyone looks forward to, right? Wrong on my account. Little did I know that I would be moving from my hometown in Nevada all the way down south to the heart of Texas before my senior year. I was furious; my whole life I had grown up in Nevada and now I was in Texas before the big year. Tempers flared and I told myself I would do my best to pass this year and leave as soon as possible to attend the school I was set on at the time, Embry-Riddle Aeronautical University. Engineering, specifically aerospace engineering, was what I had believed to be my career. Coming into the Engineering & Technologies Academy at my high school had me even further convinced me that I was set for this prospect. Anyways, the first semester had passed and I received a letter of acceptance to ERAU along with a large scholarship. What should've been a happy ending was just not meant to be. My stubbornness to abdicate from Texas had made me so arrogant that I didn't even think of applying to any schools here. And to make matters worse ERAU was a private school with high tuition costs, so even with an enormous scholarship I still would have to defer to loans which was something I couldn't put on my single mother raising three kids. I was in shock and thought all my options were forgone. Fate came knocking when I was required to take an economics course because of the Texas curriculum. I felt that economics was just one of those courses I had to take because I had no outside knowledge, notions or even assumptions on the matter. As soon as I acquired skills in economics and discovered its true meaning I realized that this was the change I needed. Sure I could've retained my interest in engineering, but economics was much more fascinating and felt like a better fit. Through my journey of discovering economics gave me the disciplinary measures I needed to attain my path in life. I realized that when life brings down, you have to get back up, move on, and make the best of your situation, otherwise you'll get left behind. Instead of making the same mistake of telling myself to run away from my problems, I knew I had to take action so that I wouldn't suffer the consequences. I wanted to succeed, and where better to do that than the University of Texas at Austin.
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