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Feb 27, 2013
Graduate / Question: Do I need to put title for SOP? [9]
Thank you for your helpful response. Here is my essay so someone can review it.
Here, at Someplace Community College, I am a full-time sophomore student who is majoring in petroleum engineering. I am applying for a scholarship because it would ensure sufficient funds needed to make me the first person in my family to obtain a college degree.
I realized that engineering was the career for me when I was in the Engineering Academy that my high school accepted me out of a limited amount of students. Having motivating math and chemistry teachers during the 11th grade helped me to grow an interest in math, physics, chemistry, and the sciences in general. Before graduating from high school, at the age of 17, I signed up to join the U.S. Army. In my 4 ˝ years of service, I got the chance to travel around the world and learn about several cultures while serving in Iraq and South Korea. I left the Army to pursue a career that I am passionate about; engineering. As the oldest child, it has been difficult to find someone within my family to guide me through the maze of academia. What I have learned is that to become successful, you have to learn from your mistakes and be prepared for obstacles. Leaving home at the age of 18, I gained real life leadership responsibilities in the army, and developed into a man of maturity and responsibility.
Right now, education is my number one priority and I am excited about the near future when I will earn a petroleum engineering degree and start my career within the oil and gas industry. This goal is not easy, so I have set measurable goals such as studying for a certain number of hours for each class, and staying aware of current events within the oil and gas industry to know what to expect.
With my degree in Petroleum Engineering my career goal is to become a drilling engineer. I am currently working for a private company who is contracted with major oil companies. This opportunity allows me to solicit conversations with petroleum engineers who have both the experience and knowledge of the industry. I need to make myself competitive in the market. It is from their sharing that I know what to study in college and what jobs are available. Receiving a scholarship will help me to focus more on my studies rather than being distracted by financial need. This will also help me by creating a snowball effect to win other scholarships to add to my resume once it is reviewed by others. All of this will help me to achieve both my educational and career goals.
What helps me work harder in college is not only self-motivation but also motivation from others scholarship awards will definitely motivate me to continue pursuing my goals. I believe that I deserve a scholarship because I have already proven that I have a hard work ethic and that. I am very dedicated to achieving my goals. Thank you for considering me for this opportunity, and I am looking forward to hearing on your decision soon.
Thank you for your helpful response. Here is my essay so someone can review it.
Here, at Someplace Community College, I am a full-time sophomore student who is majoring in petroleum engineering. I am applying for a scholarship because it would ensure sufficient funds needed to make me the first person in my family to obtain a college degree.
I realized that engineering was the career for me when I was in the Engineering Academy that my high school accepted me out of a limited amount of students. Having motivating math and chemistry teachers during the 11th grade helped me to grow an interest in math, physics, chemistry, and the sciences in general. Before graduating from high school, at the age of 17, I signed up to join the U.S. Army. In my 4 ˝ years of service, I got the chance to travel around the world and learn about several cultures while serving in Iraq and South Korea. I left the Army to pursue a career that I am passionate about; engineering. As the oldest child, it has been difficult to find someone within my family to guide me through the maze of academia. What I have learned is that to become successful, you have to learn from your mistakes and be prepared for obstacles. Leaving home at the age of 18, I gained real life leadership responsibilities in the army, and developed into a man of maturity and responsibility.
Right now, education is my number one priority and I am excited about the near future when I will earn a petroleum engineering degree and start my career within the oil and gas industry. This goal is not easy, so I have set measurable goals such as studying for a certain number of hours for each class, and staying aware of current events within the oil and gas industry to know what to expect.
With my degree in Petroleum Engineering my career goal is to become a drilling engineer. I am currently working for a private company who is contracted with major oil companies. This opportunity allows me to solicit conversations with petroleum engineers who have both the experience and knowledge of the industry. I need to make myself competitive in the market. It is from their sharing that I know what to study in college and what jobs are available. Receiving a scholarship will help me to focus more on my studies rather than being distracted by financial need. This will also help me by creating a snowball effect to win other scholarships to add to my resume once it is reviewed by others. All of this will help me to achieve both my educational and career goals.
What helps me work harder in college is not only self-motivation but also motivation from others scholarship awards will definitely motivate me to continue pursuing my goals. I believe that I deserve a scholarship because I have already proven that I have a hard work ethic and that. I am very dedicated to achieving my goals. Thank you for considering me for this opportunity, and I am looking forward to hearing on your decision soon.
