Writing Feedback / IELTS: These days many students are doing a part time job. [4]

1) These days many students are doing a part time job. Is it a good or a bad development? What is your opinion about it? Give examples from your own experience.

Please give your opinion on the below essay.

It is matter of intense debate that whether students should do part time job or only concentrate on their academic study. It is true that, with the social and economic development, the number of students doing part time job increased considerably. This approach has some pros and cons. Before reaching the conclusion, I will look into both side of this approach.

On one side, people who oppose students from doing part time job have opinion that, every person has to do job or business after completion of their studies. But university or school students need only to concentrate on their studies, as this helps them to attain good grades in exams. Eventually this will be more helpful for them to build their career after pass out from universities.

On the other hand, people who encourage and support students to do part time job, think that, this approach teaches students some important life skills, such as time management. Student who do part time job, have to manage their time wisely as they have to complete their daily commitments like study and assignments. Furthermore they also earn some money which helps to ease the burden their parent's shoulder. Also this helps them to bear their daily expenses like lodging and boarding charges. Moreover they can better understand the value of money so they spend them carefully. These skills make them a responsible person of the society.

To put in a nutshell, I pen down by saying that, pros of doing part time job while studding outweigh the cons, because students learns most important life skills and can become successful in their career.

Writing Feedback / Older people think the world was a better place when they were young. [10]

1) Older people think the world was a better place when they were young. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion
It is irrefutable that world of early centuries was better place to live than today's modern world. Many arguments surround my opinion.
First of all today whole world is heading toward the doom because of the dire Global Warning problem. Increasing population and pollution are the main reason behind this situation. This has many detrimental effects on human as well on animal health. Demand of homes increased significantly because of which land is becoming scarce. Growing traffic is another dire problem of today's world because of which pollution is increasing exorbitantly. Level of drinking water has enormously fallen down because of the modern agricultural technique and industrialization.

However the epoch when elderly people were young was totally different, there were not any such problems like pollution and traffic. They were used to spend lot of time with their family and friends, which is very difficult today to spare some time for family. This is turns increased strain in family relationship. Moreover Today's young generation just ignoring the cultural values. For instance, in the country like India who has reach cultural heritage, young population is thinking that its culture is obsolete and they are adapting the western culture. But they are forgetting the fact that diversity is imperative in order to present our-self different from other.

On the other hand I agree to the fact that today we have many advanced technologies like Computer, Internet, mobile phones etc. which has improved our lifestyle and made many difficult things easy. For example Internet and mobile phone has made communication very easy and fast. Improvement in medical science has increased the human life.

To put in the nutshell, I pen down by saying that, even though we have advance technology today but we have lost the peace of mind and relaxed life and relief. That's why I feel that world of early centuries was the better place.