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Apr 5, 2013
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This is my writing of TOEFL, please help me to improve the paper. Thank you.
"Why going to university or college"
Nowadays, attending in university seems to be a trend that most students follow to. But why people are going to university? In my opinion, there should be some reasons.
Firstly, people attending in university will acquire subject knowledge firmly and systematically. They should attend in classes, discuss on major with others, do assignment after classes and so on. All these go on in a scientific progress, and at the end of a team, final exam will, in generally, ensure that students have a good commend of the knowledge on the subjects. During period of studying, they should read many relative materials and thought deeply on the issue, so their studying and analysis skill will be improved. At the same time, there should be some difficulty in the way, such as the time arrangement, choosing problem, students should try to overcome them and adjust themselves all the time.
Secondly, life in campus is colorful and diversity, student can enjoy their life during the time. There are so many activities which university students can take part in, such as knowledge competition games which students can pick up knowledge in a interesting form, parties which students can dress up to show their beauty and confidence. These events pervade good chance for university students to make friends and have a deeper understanding about others. What's more, there are some opportunities to get a close contact with society, such as some programs hold by company which students will join staffs in doing some work, so these students could learn much by the opportunity of communicating and dealing problem with social elites and experts.
Lastly, with a full education in university, students will get a degree which seems as a access to a good job. Now many companies prefer to employ people who at least own bachelor degree. If a person who do not have this degree, especially in crisis time, it should be a disadvantage to find a job. This does not mean that the bachelor degree paper is important, but it means the studying in university which has prepared the skill and ability useful in next work.
So, as I have mentioned above, there are some reason for why students want to go university.
This is my writing of TOEFL, please help me to improve the paper. Thank you.
"Why going to university or college"
Nowadays, attending in university seems to be a trend that most students follow to. But why people are going to university? In my opinion, there should be some reasons.
Firstly, people attending in university will acquire subject knowledge firmly and systematically. They should attend in classes, discuss on major with others, do assignment after classes and so on. All these go on in a scientific progress, and at the end of a team, final exam will, in generally, ensure that students have a good commend of the knowledge on the subjects. During period of studying, they should read many relative materials and thought deeply on the issue, so their studying and analysis skill will be improved. At the same time, there should be some difficulty in the way, such as the time arrangement, choosing problem, students should try to overcome them and adjust themselves all the time.
Secondly, life in campus is colorful and diversity, student can enjoy their life during the time. There are so many activities which university students can take part in, such as knowledge competition games which students can pick up knowledge in a interesting form, parties which students can dress up to show their beauty and confidence. These events pervade good chance for university students to make friends and have a deeper understanding about others. What's more, there are some opportunities to get a close contact with society, such as some programs hold by company which students will join staffs in doing some work, so these students could learn much by the opportunity of communicating and dealing problem with social elites and experts.
Lastly, with a full education in university, students will get a degree which seems as a access to a good job. Now many companies prefer to employ people who at least own bachelor degree. If a person who do not have this degree, especially in crisis time, it should be a disadvantage to find a job. This does not mean that the bachelor degree paper is important, but it means the studying in university which has prepared the skill and ability useful in next work.
So, as I have mentioned above, there are some reason for why students want to go university.
