Graduate / Learn how to see,Realize that everything connects to everything else;Letter of INTENT [NEW]

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"Learn how to see. Realize that everything connects to everything else. "
-Leonardo da vinci

The concept of engineering science one way or the other had its roots deep within the heart of physics and mathematics. It is right to say that I decided to become an engineer because of the unbiased passion I had towards these two adventurous subjects. I term them 'adventurous 'because I feel that each concept had an approach towards every individual entity which was hard to believe but amused by the way how it connected to the alternate spheres of what we learn in our engineering.

No idea on today`s world is unique as it is an extension of many other things or collation of multiple things together. In my engineering, I made a mini project on the mechanism of windscreen wiper of cars. I tried to the traditional mechanism with different components of a wiper system from a Truck, SUV (Sport Utility Vehicle), Bus and also a car. The project was challenging as the integration involved parts of different mechanisms together and it was successful at the end. But what made me so proud of my creation is not the success of the mini - project but the usage of the tool after its review in my college as a class board cleaner system.

Where did I get this inspiration from? Not only the books but also from the outside industrial world. I had the chance to do a few summer internships at a global automotive supplier company, manufacturing company and an aircraft maintenance company. I learned the processes and the business involvements of the companies more than the technical aspects. I understood that the business involvement in any area is far more significant than the technical aspects. But there must always be balance of nature between these two forces which govern the industrial scenario and rightly so, neither can gain an upper hand without its comrade's assistance.

This balance of nature must also present in one`s academic career as I firmly believed books and grades are not the only source of career development of a student. My interest towards event management made me deal with events both technical and non technical in my college. I understood that it is not easier to manage money and certainly not easy to manage people. But challenges always try to bring the best in you and I proved no exception. The cultural event and the technical event became a huge success while the latter brought out valuable thoughts and insights on the engineering industry.

A non-academic project "Improving Fuel Efficiency through grooves in squish areas" was an extension of the technical paper. I found this particular concept interesting not only because the world is moving towards saving our exhaustible resources but also due to the fact the world is moving towards a sustainable energy system. In such case, it is not easy to turn down the existing energy systems overnight and replace them with new sustainable ones. The project which I worked on does bring up energy saving in the current system without upgrading it to new system. It is a cost effective and a feasible way of salvaging the resources before it completely goes out of our way.

After completion of my bachelors, I have been working in XXXXXX as an associate engineer for past 15 months. The experience has improved me as a professional both in my approach and in my attitude. It has made me a person who involves more in action than words. It has also evolved my perception towards life and career and I would say this as one of the major reasons that incited me to choose this graduate program.

<Program Name - Masters > - A graduate program that comprises a right balance of Engineering and Management modules with focus on Industry as well as the Management skills tailored for the industry. Reading through the curriculum, modules such as Production Engineering, Integrated Management and Business in Engineering I feel that I will keep myself abreast of all the latest developments in industry level as well as in research and development. I am confident that the interaction with students from different culture, language and discipline would help me enhance my learning in a multi faceted study environment. With expert guidance from renowned faculty and the quality of advance education, I will be able to prove my mettle in the current competitive industry.