Dunham
Jun 5, 2013
Writing Feedback / Balance between both indoor and outdoor activities as they both are essential [8]
It is apparent for almost all people that children need to know more and more about electronic gadgets and how to use them as long as they want to keep pace with modern life. On the other hand , some parents are concerned about the way their children are getting used to spend their time with computer and electronic entertainment for the sheer amount of time while they do not even care about outdoor activities. It would be useful if we know more about plus and bad points of both views.
Not being out of touch with modern life, children are supposed to use computer and watch screen media and since they could be really tempting, they might end up working with them for a long time. Meanwhile, schools assign more and more homework that children are not able to do without using computer and it is plain, the more children use computer, the more they become addicted to it.
In contrast, direct exposure to nature and doing outdoor activities are essential for children in order to get to know more about both the environment and how to communicate with other people. In addition, parents should encourage their children to spend some time outdoor, playing with their friends and working out, provided that they are concerned about rise in obesity in their children.
As it was mentioned above, it is clear that parents cannot stop their children using modern gadgets since they live in a modern world = because of living in a modern world On the other hand = besides that , being in society and among other people are crucial for children. From my point of view, parents are supposed to help their children to make balance between both indoor and outdoor activities as they both are essential.
I will use different structures to make better essay
It is apparent for almost all people that children need to know more and more about electronic gadgets and how to use them as long as they want to keep pace with modern life. On the other hand , some parents are concerned about the way their children are getting used to spend their time with computer and electronic entertainment for the sheer amount of time while they do not even care about outdoor activities. It would be useful if we know more about plus and bad points of both views.
Not being out of touch with modern life, children are supposed to use computer and watch screen media and since they could be really tempting, they might end up working with them for a long time. Meanwhile, schools assign more and more homework that children are not able to do without using computer and it is plain, the more children use computer, the more they become addicted to it.
In contrast, direct exposure to nature and doing outdoor activities are essential for children in order to get to know more about both the environment and how to communicate with other people. In addition, parents should encourage their children to spend some time outdoor, playing with their friends and working out, provided that they are concerned about rise in obesity in their children.
As it was mentioned above, it is clear that parents cannot stop their children using modern gadgets since they live in a modern world = because of living in a modern world On the other hand = besides that , being in society and among other people are crucial for children. From my point of view, parents are supposed to help their children to make balance between both indoor and outdoor activities as they both are essential.
I will use different structures to make better essay
