Writing Feedback / parents are the first people who show the children what they should or shouldnt [7]

That was [b]goood[b]! Although i do want to ask if that was your final draft or not because there were A LOT of spelling errors. the topic was nice and your reasoning made sense to me. I understand if you are not from the U.S or anywhere that does not count English as their 1st language so i totally get it. When is this due? I recommend that you end your essay with something like "In conclusion i believe ____ _____ ____ because of (your reasoning from before.) then you say. That is why i thought ________ _________ and _____ for those reasons. K? Great job and i hope i was helpful! BTW: im in 6 grade in america so im used to doing these stuff. ;)