Posts by melectric

melectric

Jul 15, 2013

Writing Feedback / Describe a museum in Iraq [7]

What's your essay prompt?

yes, I think so! :)

This is the prompt of the essay:

Describe a museum
1) How often do you visit the museum?
2) Which type of museum is popular in your country?
3) Why do you want to visit the museum?

:)

melectric

Jul 14, 2013

Writing Feedback / Describe a museum in Iraq [7]

Is this a topic for one of your speaking tasks? It's a pretty short prompt !

This topic from IELTS writing exams, task 1. Actually I am start preparing to take IBT TOEFL soon nor IELTS because the date of IBT TOEFL more sooner.

About how long is my essay? it's almost about 250 words. Task one in ibt toefl as well as in ietls asks us to write 150 to 250 words, for that this essay is kind of short! :)

Introduce the topic?!!!! Do you mean that my topic sentence should be more clear? because in my topic I mentioned "history, heritage and museums", could you give me an example?

Thanks :)

melectric

Jul 14, 2013

Writing Feedback / Describe a museum in Iraq [7]

Could I say " I have visited" instead of " I visited"? Because this trip to museums still impact on me, like when you say: I have been to France one!

I think opportunity is more suitable is this sentence "Visiting museums is important because we have the chance to know more and more about our civilization, history and heritages."

Do you agree?

Is the essay structure is clear or need to work on it?

Thanks :)

melectric

Jul 14, 2013

Writing Feedback / Describe a museum in Iraq [7]

This essay will outline the types of popular museums in Iraq, The impact of our history and heritage of Iraq on our museums. I have visited three popular Iraqi museums twelve years ago. The three types are popular here: Natural, National and Wax museum. Visiting museums is important to know more and more about our civilization, history and heritages.

Natural museum gives us lots of knowledge in many aspects about animals that have been living in this land as well as in other lands. In addition, visiting it represent a good opportunity to school and college students to extend their knowledge and help them in their studies.

Next, National museum is the biggest one here. Furthermore, into it you can find the history of Iraq more than three thousands of years ago. It was a great opportunity and experience to visit it and know more and more about Iraq's history.

After that, Wax museum shows a style life of Iraqis' people. So, you will have an amazing journey into it to see how our grandfathers' was living.

Museums to this time still have the same ancient design and style. Visiting museums represent a journey to the ancient history.
Clearly, Museums play a vital role to show Countries history and give us a great trip to travel entire it and see our ancient civilization.