Posts by eko_widianto

eko_widianto

Jul 24, 2013

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: The problems created by unlimited use of cars [4]

idea not bad. vocab good. but grammar seems to be your main problem. improve your grammar

eko_widianto

Jul 24, 2013

Undergraduate / I believe that I am a good student; PERSONAL STATEMENT - WARWICK HEFP [6]

and a little more, the first few sentences.. i think it is no need to write it. just replace it with your ability.

eko_widianto

Jul 24, 2013

Undergraduate / I believe that I am a good student; PERSONAL STATEMENT - WARWICK HEFP [6]

Since then, I realized that I had shown a significant improvement. Then I did some research into university that provides finance degree

should be financial degree

Eventually I found out that Warwick University is one of the best Business degree universitys in the world

I am looking forward to build~~ing~~ a career in financial sector

The reason I choose financial degree

eko_widianto

Jul 24, 2013

Undergraduate / I believe that I am a good student; PERSONAL STATEMENT - WARWICK HEFP [6]

hey
i find out the reason yo wanted to study there is quite good. but maybe could you state / add more about what is/are your specialization or what you think that you are unique and different from others? it may add better impression.

eko_widianto

Jul 15, 2013

Grammar, Usage / 'Class who is absent..' - Which is more appropriate to say? [14]

for what i think, the first one is to the point while the second one, you still need to ask who after asking the "do we have absent today"