Undergraduate / 'bike race' - U of Chicago - How did you get caught? [6]

Eek! I'm embarrassed that I missed the were, where in the beginning! Sorry to not offer more critiques, but I think I've done all I can for this essay. It is fabulous. If you have time today can you look over mine? Thanks!

Scholarship / Mild terror is a very effective motivator. (Swarthmore College) [4]

Thank you so much for your input! I feel like the essay is much stronger now. Sending it off in the wee hours of the morning and off to Costa Rica in an hour! WOOT.