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Aug 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / Summary of Alexie's " The Joy of Reading and Writing: Superman and me" Draft [3]

L1 Summary of Sherman Alexie's "The Joy of Reading and Writing: Superman and Me"

Sherman Alexie wrote "The Joy of Reading and Writing: Superman and Me" with the purpose of informing his readers of the challenges he faced as a young Indian boy that was not supposed to be educated by societies standards. Alexie used his own personal experiences as a young smart Indian to express his point of view.

His love of books derived from his love and adoration of his father. At the age of three, Alexie recalls how he taught himself how to read by analyzing a Superman comic book. Telling the story to himself by utilizing the pictures to create the story. He then went on to realize the purpose of a paragraph, saying "a paragraph is a fence that held words". Alexie then in turn looked at everything in that way. By utilizing this method he created, it enabled him to gain the knowledge of reading.

Upon entering school on the reservation he fought with other children daily. The children played the role of the dumb Indian while at school so they wouldn't be ridiculed as they did him. Alexie was arrogant, smart and determined not to be that stereotype regardless of any suggestions. His drive to propel forward encompassed his life, in high school he chose public schools instead of the reservation. He still faced the same ridicule but never let it interfere with his goal to prove to the world that Indians can be educated, too.
mopoohaddict   
Aug 28, 2013
Undergraduate / When I was fifteen I started to work at my family's pet store; Conflict in life [4]

I really enjoyed your essay. I loved the flow of the story and the surprise of the "drug dealing". The only critique I can offer is to reinforce the type of person you become from the incident. More honest, caring, knowledgeable or how your true morals and values led your desire to improve the quality of care for the reptiles and customers. That should be more of why you did what you did than to prove him wrong. Dig deep and add some of your emotions. Good luck!
mopoohaddict   
Aug 28, 2013
Undergraduate / It is a common expression that life is a journey; TAMU TRANSFER PAPER [3]

I think is awesome that even with autism you are striving for excellence. First and foremost I noticed a lot of grammatical errors. Ensure that you are proof reading carefully. I also feel that there should be more inclusion on the reasons why you feel that a human resource field is the right field for you, not that you are qualified as of yet. For example how can you impact the associates you would work for. Human resource is a tough field, think about what qualities you possess and the qualities you hope to learn from A&M. By meshing them together you will have the answer to how you can help your associates. What does A&M offer that interest you specifically academically? How would you use it? Ensure that each paragraph is about one topic. Limit your opinions of the schools reputation and focus on your desire to attend a school that is going to get you where you want to go academically. You can mention that it has been a life long dream with out making it sound like you are desperate. Good luck and I look forward to seeing a revised version.
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