sr005307
Sep 1, 2013
Undergraduate / I want to make a difference and leave the most positive impact on the world - activities [3]
Wow.
you are amazing.
Wow.
you are amazing.
sr005307
Aug 31, 2013
Writing Feedback / Toefl; CITY OR COUNTRY? Which place is more appealing for living? [6]
Thank you Mr.
Would you mind to recommend vocabulary books or lists for writing?
It would be helpful so much :)
Thank you Mr.
Would you mind to recommend vocabulary books or lists for writing?
It would be helpful so much :)
sr005307
Aug 31, 2013
Writing Feedback / Toefl; CITY OR COUNTRY? Which place is more appealing for living? [6]
Ind 3. Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
In Korea, Seoul is the most biggest city in the country, and it's about half a population of the country. Many people's choice makes it clear that actually it is convenient to live in city than a small town considering job offers, shops or etc. So I prefer to live in a big city. To live in a small town gives people romantic feeling, however it is hard to live along realistically. Firstly, job offers are more easy to be get than small towns. Secondly, the distance for shops in small town is farther than shops in the city.
First of all, to live a life, people need jobs, and a city offers them better than a small town. In a small town, there are jobs like farming or catering cows are common, and it doesn't supply sufficient numbers of job vacancies. Only for their sons or known people could get job offers. In contrast, a city offers limitless kinds of job offers and the many numbers of vacancies. Also, developement of the economy in a city makes it possible to hire more employee than a small town without firing. The industrial composition of a small town is hard to increase in quantity drastically.
Secondly, to live a life, shopping is very important, and in a city, people could go shopping more easily than rural places. It's everyday life and no matter how the person is sacred or strong, person should at least eat to live on. Also, people should buy wearables for normal life. Also other instruments like spoons, papers, or supplies are needed for being a human not an animal. In a city the average distance to the shop is 400m, however in a small town, the average distance to the shop is about 5km according to the Korean government. Also, thinking that the public transportation is better in a city than a small town, the actual time and money to go to the shop is more economical and time reducing in a city than a small town. In a small town they must use their own vehicle or have to wait 1 more hour to take a bus.
In summery, for a living, the real life problem is important, so I prefer to live in a city rather than in a small town. The first reason is that a city offers more jobs than a small town. The second reason is that in a small to go to a shop is a very time consuming thing. However in the future, in a small town, there will be a job offer and a market distance would be nearer also because of development of technology of information and transportation. So the trend would be change into the preference of urban lives according to development of technology.
Ind 3. Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
In Korea, Seoul is the most biggest city in the country, and it's about half a population of the country. Many people's choice makes it clear that actually it is convenient to live in city than a small town considering job offers, shops or etc. So I prefer to live in a big city. To live in a small town gives people romantic feeling, however it is hard to live along realistically. Firstly, job offers are more easy to be get than small towns. Secondly, the distance for shops in small town is farther than shops in the city.
First of all, to live a life, people need jobs, and a city offers them better than a small town. In a small town, there are jobs like farming or catering cows are common, and it doesn't supply sufficient numbers of job vacancies. Only for their sons or known people could get job offers. In contrast, a city offers limitless kinds of job offers and the many numbers of vacancies. Also, developement of the economy in a city makes it possible to hire more employee than a small town without firing. The industrial composition of a small town is hard to increase in quantity drastically.
Secondly, to live a life, shopping is very important, and in a city, people could go shopping more easily than rural places. It's everyday life and no matter how the person is sacred or strong, person should at least eat to live on. Also, people should buy wearables for normal life. Also other instruments like spoons, papers, or supplies are needed for being a human not an animal. In a city the average distance to the shop is 400m, however in a small town, the average distance to the shop is about 5km according to the Korean government. Also, thinking that the public transportation is better in a city than a small town, the actual time and money to go to the shop is more economical and time reducing in a city than a small town. In a small town they must use their own vehicle or have to wait 1 more hour to take a bus.
In summery, for a living, the real life problem is important, so I prefer to live in a city rather than in a small town. The first reason is that a city offers more jobs than a small town. The second reason is that in a small to go to a shop is a very time consuming thing. However in the future, in a small town, there will be a job offer and a market distance would be nearer also because of development of technology of information and transportation. So the trend would be change into the preference of urban lives according to development of technology.
