Suzetbrk
Oct 26, 2013
Undergraduate / I am now ready to move on something bigger; REASONS for TRANSFER [4]
Thank you very much! I really appreciate your help.
Thank you very much! I really appreciate your help.
Suzetbrk
Sep 12, 2013
Undergraduate / Essay on Volunteering in Chinese National Guard, common app [7]
Starting with an appropriate anecdote about the police would be a good idea. Also you should say the advantages that you are expecting from being a police officer, both on a professional and personal aspects.
Starting with an appropriate anecdote about the police would be a good idea. Also you should say the advantages that you are expecting from being a police officer, both on a professional and personal aspects.
Suzetbrk
Sep 12, 2013
Undergraduate / I am now ready to move on something bigger; REASONS for TRANSFER [4]
Hi guys, I am a college sophomore and I am planning to transfer into an engineering program, an this my essay. It would be very helpful for me if u could have a look and post some comments. Thank you!
Please provide a statement that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve. (250-650 words)
When I was planning to come to study in the United States I was asked complete an ESL program, before I can be considered as a full-time student, since English is neither my first nor my second language. The English placement test that was meant to determine which level of English I would be enrolled in ended up showing that my English skills were good enough to be a full-time student and consequently exempted me from the ESL program. Being exempted of ESL course was good news for me because it allowed me to save time and money. On the other hand I was somehow forced to stay at Dean College even though there is not any engineering program offered.
When I look back at the three semesters that I have spent at Dean College, I realize that although my journey at Dean started as a choice by default, it made me a better student, and also a better person. My calculus courses taught me to be focused, and my English essays made me a better writer and taught me to work hard to achieve my goal even if that meant staying up until 3 a.m. Campus life helped me to feel comfortable with people of different backgrounds; my untidy roommate taught me tolerance. I left my first home seeking a better education, and now I am leaving my second home, Dean, for an engineering program. I have been "prepared for what's next" and I am now ready to move on something bigger, something more challenging. I am ready to move to an engineering program.
As far as I can remember I have always been interested in technology, from simple FM radios to engines to telephones. I did not know it when I was younger, but I was interested in any devices that produce or use electrical energy. During the fall 2007, I received a 30 gigabyte iPod; from that moment the compact disc player that I used to brag to my friends became obsolete. I had no longer any reasons to carry around a stack of compact discs. The 30 gigabyte of internal memory could store up to 7,500 songs and the manipulation became easier with "touch control"; I was mesmerized. That's the point when my interest in technology grew into the dream to become an engineer. I started to work toward my future career in engineering, when I was in high school. I took some courses in the technology field; among them: electrical drawings, electrical machines, and some basic electronics.
The author and entrepreneur Jim Rohn once said, "get around people who have something of value to share with you. Their impact will continue to have a significant effect on your life long they have departed". Asides from being able to pursue my dream major, transferring to a bigger and more active university will give me the opportunity to find more people who share the same interest with me and better chances to participate in major scientific research.,
As a future engineer, my dream is to work on something that is bigger and more important than me, something that will last longer than the duration of my life. I don't know yet what it will be nor when it will happen but I know that the first step is transferring into the engineering program at a large, well-respected university. I know that as an individual I can do something good, but if I work with a team I am sure that we can do great things, because I believe that collaborative efforts can yield success. Thus I will benefit from studying in a challenging environment with hardworking peers. Plus studying in a research university will give me the opportunity to meet some of my future business partners or colleagues.
Hi guys, I am a college sophomore and I am planning to transfer into an engineering program, an this my essay. It would be very helpful for me if u could have a look and post some comments. Thank you!
Please provide a statement that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve. (250-650 words)
When I was planning to come to study in the United States I was asked complete an ESL program, before I can be considered as a full-time student, since English is neither my first nor my second language. The English placement test that was meant to determine which level of English I would be enrolled in ended up showing that my English skills were good enough to be a full-time student and consequently exempted me from the ESL program. Being exempted of ESL course was good news for me because it allowed me to save time and money. On the other hand I was somehow forced to stay at Dean College even though there is not any engineering program offered.
When I look back at the three semesters that I have spent at Dean College, I realize that although my journey at Dean started as a choice by default, it made me a better student, and also a better person. My calculus courses taught me to be focused, and my English essays made me a better writer and taught me to work hard to achieve my goal even if that meant staying up until 3 a.m. Campus life helped me to feel comfortable with people of different backgrounds; my untidy roommate taught me tolerance. I left my first home seeking a better education, and now I am leaving my second home, Dean, for an engineering program. I have been "prepared for what's next" and I am now ready to move on something bigger, something more challenging. I am ready to move to an engineering program.
As far as I can remember I have always been interested in technology, from simple FM radios to engines to telephones. I did not know it when I was younger, but I was interested in any devices that produce or use electrical energy. During the fall 2007, I received a 30 gigabyte iPod; from that moment the compact disc player that I used to brag to my friends became obsolete. I had no longer any reasons to carry around a stack of compact discs. The 30 gigabyte of internal memory could store up to 7,500 songs and the manipulation became easier with "touch control"; I was mesmerized. That's the point when my interest in technology grew into the dream to become an engineer. I started to work toward my future career in engineering, when I was in high school. I took some courses in the technology field; among them: electrical drawings, electrical machines, and some basic electronics.
The author and entrepreneur Jim Rohn once said, "get around people who have something of value to share with you. Their impact will continue to have a significant effect on your life long they have departed". Asides from being able to pursue my dream major, transferring to a bigger and more active university will give me the opportunity to find more people who share the same interest with me and better chances to participate in major scientific research.,
As a future engineer, my dream is to work on something that is bigger and more important than me, something that will last longer than the duration of my life. I don't know yet what it will be nor when it will happen but I know that the first step is transferring into the engineering program at a large, well-respected university. I know that as an individual I can do something good, but if I work with a team I am sure that we can do great things, because I believe that collaborative efforts can yield success. Thus I will benefit from studying in a challenging environment with hardworking peers. Plus studying in a research university will give me the opportunity to meet some of my future business partners or colleagues.