Posts by hannahkr09
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I come from two different cultures; UC Personal Statement [6]
This should be a lot longer. You need to elaborate more on everything. It feels like you are just providing a small glance into your life. I would talk about how you have grown as a person by being multicultral and eliminate the bullying stage because it makes you look immature. Your writing style is also a little casual. Make it more formal!
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