jsk_jin
Sep 28, 2013
Undergraduate / TOP in my college list ; Georgia Tech - Attraction and Contribution [2]
Why are you interested in attending Georgia Tech and what do you hope to contribute to our community?
Ever since I realized that math and physics are where my passion lays, Georgia Tech has been on the top of my college list. Being a student in Georgia, I have visited the campus on several occasions. I was there to compete in the GT High School math contest, to serve as a judge for a minor award in the Senior Graduate Project fair, and was also invited to view the Inventure Prize. These experiences taught me about Georgia Tech. Each time I went there, all I feel are the eager of learning, the dedication and confidence of the students to their work, and most importantly, the excitement of innovation. That's what I want to be, and that's the atmosphere I dream of. If I can be part of the school, I will do my best to amplify these characters by both thriving academically and actively participating in clubs and sports activities. I am a 900-1000 rated table tennis player, aconstant math competition competitor, and I look forward to carry them on in college.
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The limit is 150 words max, while the paragraph above has 174. I need some advice on:1. How to thin it down a bit? and 2. How to make it better?
I am not confident about my writing skills....
I feel like I should extend the contribution section more, but I would have to cut my attraction section, which I personally believe that it will be very good and effective to the essay viewer.
Why are you interested in attending Georgia Tech and what do you hope to contribute to our community?
Ever since I realized that math and physics are where my passion lays, Georgia Tech has been on the top of my college list. Being a student in Georgia, I have visited the campus on several occasions. I was there to compete in the GT High School math contest, to serve as a judge for a minor award in the Senior Graduate Project fair, and was also invited to view the Inventure Prize. These experiences taught me about Georgia Tech. Each time I went there, all I feel are the eager of learning, the dedication and confidence of the students to their work, and most importantly, the excitement of innovation. That's what I want to be, and that's the atmosphere I dream of. If I can be part of the school, I will do my best to amplify these characters by both thriving academically and actively participating in clubs and sports activities. I am a 900-1000 rated table tennis player, aconstant math competition competitor, and I look forward to carry them on in college.
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The limit is 150 words max, while the paragraph above has 174. I need some advice on:1. How to thin it down a bit? and 2. How to make it better?
I am not confident about my writing skills....
I feel like I should extend the contribution section more, but I would have to cut my attraction section, which I personally believe that it will be very good and effective to the essay viewer.
