Anelis123
Oct 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / "Patrick walked into the room and spotted sandy sitting alone" [4]
Patrick walked into the room and spotted sandy sitting alone. He walks up to her and very nervously asked her if she wanted to got to the movies with him, and she said yes. Later that day Patrick became a nervous wreck. He bought some flowers and went to her house. When Patrick knocked on the door and she opened it, Patrick's world just seemed to freeze, all he could see was her beauty glowing in the light of the moon. He handed Sandy the flowers, and she hugged him. Just as soon as she hugged him , he felt sparks crawl up his up arms and go all over his body. Right then and there Patrick knew he was head over heels for this girl and would do anything for her,he would be anything for her. Every time he saw, talked, or even looked at Sandy he would blush and look down at the ground. That was the day Patrick figured out that Sandy was the one for him.
Patrick walked into the room and spotted sandy sitting alone. He walks up to her and very nervously asked her if she wanted to got to the movies with him, and she said yes. Later that day Patrick became a nervous wreck. He bought some flowers and went to her house. When Patrick knocked on the door and she opened it, Patrick's world just seemed to freeze, all he could see was her beauty glowing in the light of the moon. He handed Sandy the flowers, and she hugged him. Just as soon as she hugged him , he felt sparks crawl up his up arms and go all over his body. Right then and there Patrick knew he was head over heels for this girl and would do anything for her,he would be anything for her. Every time he saw, talked, or even looked at Sandy he would blush and look down at the ground. That was the day Patrick figured out that Sandy was the one for him.