Undergraduate / Boston University offers everything I look for in a school; Why Boston University? [2]

This is for BU's writing supplement. I'd really appreciate some feedback and some help correcting grammar and punctuation errors. Thank you in advance!

Prompt: In a few sentences, please tell us why BU is a good fit for you and what specifically has led you to apply for admission?

Boston University offers everything I look for in a school. The finance program allows me to major in the subject that I'm interested in while learning about business administration. The school of management offers a curriculum that will give me the in depth understanding I need to succeed in my career in finance as well as learn about other subjects I'm interested in and apply them to my core major. As the daughter of small business owners, it is my drive to know the science behind what makes a business financially successful as well as knowing how to make good financial decisions.

Aside from the stellar academics Boston University provides its students, I first decided I wanted to attend BU the day I visited the campus. First, I fell in love with the city, then, I looked for a campus that I could see myself thriving in. I researched the schools curriculum and fell in love with BU and the central location of the campus.

In conclusion, BU makes a perfect school for me because it offers an amazing finance program that I can learn from in order to succeed in my future career. It offers a broad array of resources such as a diverse student body, organizations, clubs, and state of the art facilities. Additionally, BU is located in the middle of one of the most innovative cities in the world.

Undergraduate / Family Responsibilities and Duties; Business Admin (Finance) Major:) [5]

Prompt: "Please provide a statement (appr. 250-500 words) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve."

The kids are screaming, enchiladas are sizzling, the washer is beeping, but I'll be damned if I don't finish this calculus problem. Looking after two kids and a baby have taught me to multitask. From a young age, I understood the responsibilities that came with being the oldest in a struggling immigrant family. I learned to cook, clean, translate and the many intricacies of baby babble well before I could drive. It was a demanding position but one I assumed with passion and love for my family.

Because of the rough financial patch our family went through, my parents had no choice but to work long hours. I was expected not only to help with household responsibilities, but also to learn everything about our small multi-service family business. At the age of 15, I began to learn everything about foreign currency exchange, tax preparation, car insurance, and car registration. I helped with everything from filing to customer service until I was old enough to obtain appropriate licenses and work there on my own.

Despite these circumstances, my desire to further my education stayed. I enrolled in community college and was taught by amazing professors that helped me pick my career path. Although my families' struggles lessened, I still face the same challenges: having to balance a job, family responsibilities, and school work loads. Due to these experiences, I am now more mature and am able to manage my responsibilities better than I did when I was younger.

Now that I am nearing the end of the "Community College" chapter in my life, I am hoping to transfer to a four year school where I can further my interest in business administration with an emphasis in finance. The circumstances my family was faced with taught me the importance of knowing how to make smart financial decisions. My goal is to become a financial advisor where I can help people make the best financial decisions for themselves, their business, or big corporations.