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Essays / question about UC ; Describe the world you come from [11]

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Essays / question about UC ; Describe the world you come from [11]

UC 1 essay ideas - the world you come from; my dream to go into medical field

Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

I have a couple of ideas:
Me being the first to go to college
My mom or dad not finishing high school
Big responsibilities (i.e. Helping take care of my younger siblings)
Supportive family
Caring a lot about others
My dream:
To enter the medical field