Writing Feedback / CLEP English Comp. -- "That Government is Best Which Governs Least" [5]

Hi... I just took this test, and my best advice is... don't sweat it! My question basically asked me to agree or disagree whether or not inventions cause more problems than they solve. I just did a quick 5 paragraph essay in less than the time limit, looked it over for grammatical errors, and submitted it. My score? 63! A definite passer, since the bottom line is 50. So you could go much simpler if you wanted to. Just introduce the topic, state your opinion, 3 supporting facts, 3 paragraphs about them, and a concluding paragraph. That should get you a passing score. Good luck!

Graduate / 'my passion for teaching and working with children' - Graduate Essay (Dept:special education) [9]

Good job-- you did very well in keeping my interest till the end! My suggestion is that you add a little more structure so that the reader doesn't feel like he is being pulled along by a stream-of-consciousness. For example, choose three reasons you grew to be passionate about children's education, lay them out in the first paragraph, explain them one paragraph at time, and then conclude in a last paragraph. I liked how you had a quote to support your points, and that's a very good quote!