Aron101
Nov 8, 2013
Undergraduate / Motivation letter for RSM - correction of my spelling and grammar any opinions 2 ;) [2]
hey guys/girls need your help on correct grammar on my motivation letter ;) and opinion ;) thnks ;)
Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing this letter to inform you that I am interested in applying to the Rotterdam School of Management Erasmus.
My name is Fares Sereir, I am 16 years old and have a double nationality. My mother is Dutch and my father Algerian. I was born in the Netherlands in Amsterdam, and over the years of my life I have been travelling from country to country experiencing different cultures thanks to My Fathers Company. I have travelled to many countries such as Spain, France, Italy, Germany, Algeria, Morocco, Tunisia; and over the past years of my life I have picked up a lot from these wonderful countries and their thriving and blossoming cultures and Economies. I have managed to speak 5 languages which are English, French, Dutch, Arabic(Algerian), Spanish and meet wonderful new people from different nationalities. Since I was a kid I have been going to British curriculum schools such as The British School of Amsterdam, The British school of Algiers El kalimat and also The International School of Amsterdam also known as ISM, and this has always helped me be an international diverse person in general and look at the world in a different way.
I have always been extremely curious about Business in general whether it's buying or selling, or running a large bank or company; it must have been thanks to my Father. I always used to assist him in his business meeting where he talked about real estate, the stock market to me as I was just a kid it just fascinated me. When I was just 14 I started to learn about the stock market and how it works, the idea of stocks and shares and profit could be made in such a critical moment and that just the smallest impact in the financial sector such as the financial crisis of 2008 was just amazing. For me it was like being introduced to a world within a world one that runs our lives where critical decisions that impact everyone are made. I remember just last year I tried to put my trading skills to the test I told my dad that if he gave me 200 euro to trade with within a week I'd turn in to 500 and that I would keep a profit of 100 Euros. At first he thought I was joking and that I couldn't do it, but that was the beauty of it a challenge was awaiting me and I never say no to a challenge. So I downloaded this free trading platform and showed my Father my skills where I played around a bit with 1000 dollars which was free credit and turned it to 1100 trading on the euro against the dollar. He was quite impressed and decided to give me the money and it was then when the game began I spent a whole day analysing the stocks mostly the currency exchange the euro, dollar and pound trying to decide where I could make the highest profit to impress my father. The next day I traded on the euro vs. the dollar an area which I was familiar with, I bought and sold and guess what I made 200 euro's into 584 euro's making a profit of 384 euro's I will never forget the look on my father's face that day.
Once I reached my A levels I was extremely interested in the field of business administration and decided that it was the field I wished to pursue in the future. Then one day I sat down with a friend of my father the director of Sonatrach which is an Algerian oil company and asked him for some advice on Business universities in Europe, and I remember he directly responded ERASMUS.
After some research on my own I found out that it was the place I wanted to go, before I had been deciding on going to the London School of Economics and Political Science, but then found out that Erasmus was not just close to home it was a very brilliant yet challenging university to LSE. The reason why I chose the IBA (International Business Administration) Bachelor's program is because it is at the heart of Business a field which I am a curious and which to pursue. I want to be the one making the critical business decisions, and I know that there is no better program than the IBA for that. It will help me strengthen my Business Skills, I will learn about this growing field of interest and I shall gain an international Business perspective on the World, an understanding on how business work and how to run one successfully.
The reason why I chose the IBA at Erasmus it is that it is one of the best Business Universities in Europe. Also since Rotterdam has been the centre of the European Exchange for centuries; a great advantage for a student to learn Business. It is the ideal place to go as Rotterdam which is not just a wonderful and diverse city full of culture and growth, but is at the heart of Europe a place best to learn International Business Administration. Erasmus has a great International study program, and internship and exchange program, which really helps you gain more experience in you field of study. Its international well known reputation around the world, not just for education leaders such as the former vice president of Indonesia, but for its great faculty, alumni and professors.
After My Bachelor's I wish to pursue a PHD In a field of my interest, and hope to one day run my own company and hopefully make it grow to its potential with the skills and techniques I will learn at Erasmus. And I hope that one day my company will play a big role in the economy of the country it shall be in, and be part of the world's future growth.
hey guys/girls need your help on correct grammar on my motivation letter ;) and opinion ;) thnks ;)
Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing this letter to inform you that I am interested in applying to the Rotterdam School of Management Erasmus.
My name is Fares Sereir, I am 16 years old and have a double nationality. My mother is Dutch and my father Algerian. I was born in the Netherlands in Amsterdam, and over the years of my life I have been travelling from country to country experiencing different cultures thanks to My Fathers Company. I have travelled to many countries such as Spain, France, Italy, Germany, Algeria, Morocco, Tunisia; and over the past years of my life I have picked up a lot from these wonderful countries and their thriving and blossoming cultures and Economies. I have managed to speak 5 languages which are English, French, Dutch, Arabic(Algerian), Spanish and meet wonderful new people from different nationalities. Since I was a kid I have been going to British curriculum schools such as The British School of Amsterdam, The British school of Algiers El kalimat and also The International School of Amsterdam also known as ISM, and this has always helped me be an international diverse person in general and look at the world in a different way.
I have always been extremely curious about Business in general whether it's buying or selling, or running a large bank or company; it must have been thanks to my Father. I always used to assist him in his business meeting where he talked about real estate, the stock market to me as I was just a kid it just fascinated me. When I was just 14 I started to learn about the stock market and how it works, the idea of stocks and shares and profit could be made in such a critical moment and that just the smallest impact in the financial sector such as the financial crisis of 2008 was just amazing. For me it was like being introduced to a world within a world one that runs our lives where critical decisions that impact everyone are made. I remember just last year I tried to put my trading skills to the test I told my dad that if he gave me 200 euro to trade with within a week I'd turn in to 500 and that I would keep a profit of 100 Euros. At first he thought I was joking and that I couldn't do it, but that was the beauty of it a challenge was awaiting me and I never say no to a challenge. So I downloaded this free trading platform and showed my Father my skills where I played around a bit with 1000 dollars which was free credit and turned it to 1100 trading on the euro against the dollar. He was quite impressed and decided to give me the money and it was then when the game began I spent a whole day analysing the stocks mostly the currency exchange the euro, dollar and pound trying to decide where I could make the highest profit to impress my father. The next day I traded on the euro vs. the dollar an area which I was familiar with, I bought and sold and guess what I made 200 euro's into 584 euro's making a profit of 384 euro's I will never forget the look on my father's face that day.
Once I reached my A levels I was extremely interested in the field of business administration and decided that it was the field I wished to pursue in the future. Then one day I sat down with a friend of my father the director of Sonatrach which is an Algerian oil company and asked him for some advice on Business universities in Europe, and I remember he directly responded ERASMUS.
After some research on my own I found out that it was the place I wanted to go, before I had been deciding on going to the London School of Economics and Political Science, but then found out that Erasmus was not just close to home it was a very brilliant yet challenging university to LSE. The reason why I chose the IBA (International Business Administration) Bachelor's program is because it is at the heart of Business a field which I am a curious and which to pursue. I want to be the one making the critical business decisions, and I know that there is no better program than the IBA for that. It will help me strengthen my Business Skills, I will learn about this growing field of interest and I shall gain an international Business perspective on the World, an understanding on how business work and how to run one successfully.
The reason why I chose the IBA at Erasmus it is that it is one of the best Business Universities in Europe. Also since Rotterdam has been the centre of the European Exchange for centuries; a great advantage for a student to learn Business. It is the ideal place to go as Rotterdam which is not just a wonderful and diverse city full of culture and growth, but is at the heart of Europe a place best to learn International Business Administration. Erasmus has a great International study program, and internship and exchange program, which really helps you gain more experience in you field of study. Its international well known reputation around the world, not just for education leaders such as the former vice president of Indonesia, but for its great faculty, alumni and professors.
After My Bachelor's I wish to pursue a PHD In a field of my interest, and hope to one day run my own company and hopefully make it grow to its potential with the skills and techniques I will learn at Erasmus. And I hope that one day my company will play a big role in the economy of the country it shall be in, and be part of the world's future growth.