monokakau
Dec 11, 2013
Writing Feedback / The Equal Rights: men should be responsible for children's upbringing [4]
thank you so much i will try to do better the next time
thank you so much i will try to do better the next time
monokakau
Dec 11, 2013
Writing Feedback / The Equal Rights: men should be responsible for children's upbringing [4]
fatherhood ough to be emphasized as much as motherhood.The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that thay are also responsible for bringing up the children.To what extent do u agree or disagree(at least 250 words)
There are many people holding the opinion that the decision to give birth is up to the women so they must be in charge of bringing up the baby while others insist for the responsibility of the male.From my point of view,on account of the social equality,children's benefits and full awareness ,it is absolutely essential that the fatherhood be enhanced.
To begin with, men should be responsible for children's upbringing because of the equal rights.It never be the only girl who plays part in making a child so is it very obvious man ought to take care of his baby ?Men also deserve chances to enjoy the profound bond with their children and have happy moments seeing a child be born,grow up everyday, go to school,meet his/her perfect half-life and have a wonderful marriage life.All of those contribute to a fullfilled life for not only the women but men.
In addition,fatherhood had better be appreciated so the children can feel the unplaceable love from both moms and dads.Every children who have the single mom always suffer from the lack of dad's care.Sometimes they feel lonely,being hated and adopted,which is one of the main reason triggering to mental sporadic status or lost steps throughout their life.All should have opportunities to be taken to the park with parents,enjoy the terrible but worthy meals made by the clumsy dads.It is important a growing up boy have mortal lessons and the lovely daughter be walked down the ailes in her wedding with beloved dads.
Finally ,this way will make women fully aware of the role of their spouse.The weak side would greatly feel the responsibility of the strong ones and comprehend that both of them must be in charge of the process of bringing up a child.It may also be a motivation for fragile female not to feel lonely and easily lead to give up on having children.
In conclusion, thereby those persuasive reasons, the part of men in chirlder's upbringing process ought to be given prominence.In doing so,both the mom,dad and children would have a satisfactory life with full of happiness.
fatherhood ough to be emphasized as much as motherhood.The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that thay are also responsible for bringing up the children.To what extent do u agree or disagree(at least 250 words)
There are many people holding the opinion that the decision to give birth is up to the women so they must be in charge of bringing up the baby while others insist for the responsibility of the male.From my point of view,on account of the social equality,children's benefits and full awareness ,it is absolutely essential that the fatherhood be enhanced.
To begin with, men should be responsible for children's upbringing because of the equal rights.It never be the only girl who plays part in making a child so is it very obvious man ought to take care of his baby ?Men also deserve chances to enjoy the profound bond with their children and have happy moments seeing a child be born,grow up everyday, go to school,meet his/her perfect half-life and have a wonderful marriage life.All of those contribute to a fullfilled life for not only the women but men.
In addition,fatherhood had better be appreciated so the children can feel the unplaceable love from both moms and dads.Every children who have the single mom always suffer from the lack of dad's care.Sometimes they feel lonely,being hated and adopted,which is one of the main reason triggering to mental sporadic status or lost steps throughout their life.All should have opportunities to be taken to the park with parents,enjoy the terrible but worthy meals made by the clumsy dads.It is important a growing up boy have mortal lessons and the lovely daughter be walked down the ailes in her wedding with beloved dads.
Finally ,this way will make women fully aware of the role of their spouse.The weak side would greatly feel the responsibility of the strong ones and comprehend that both of them must be in charge of the process of bringing up a child.It may also be a motivation for fragile female not to feel lonely and easily lead to give up on having children.
In conclusion, thereby those persuasive reasons, the part of men in chirlder's upbringing process ought to be given prominence.In doing so,both the mom,dad and children would have a satisfactory life with full of happiness.
monokakau
Nov 15, 2013
Essays / As computers are being used more in education, there will be soon no role for teacher [5]
In the last decades there have been immense advances in technology in most aspects especially in the field of education..In the modern age, a large number of students rely on computers to research for information and to produce a perfect paper work for their homework.
One of the most advantage use of the computer is when it comes to distance learning. This system of education has been adopted world wide. Students today can save time and effort through distance learning. However, it can not be useful without availability of computers and Internet access
On the other hand, there are some people with the contrary opinion argue that presence of teachers is important in class and hardly can it be mimicked by computers.
In conclusion, there are two views of opinion regarding the replacement of teachers by computers
In the last decades there have been immense advances in technology in most aspects especially in the field of education..In the modern age, a large number of students rely on computers to research for information and to produce a perfect paper work for their homework.
One of the most advantage use of the computer is when it comes to distance learning. This system of education has been adopted world wide. Students today can save time and effort through distance learning. However, it can not be useful without availability of computers and Internet access
On the other hand, there are some people with the contrary opinion argue that presence of teachers is important in class and hardly can it be mimicked by computers.
In conclusion, there are two views of opinion regarding the replacement of teachers by computers
monokakau
Nov 15, 2013
Writing Feedback / if it should be parents who choose the partner of their children [5]
i am very glad for receiving the reply but can i ask why not life mate i have read this in some stories.
finally i do not know the words to express my delight to receive yours as the first reply of mine.
i am very glad for receiving the reply but can i ask why not life mate i have read this in some stories.
finally i do not know the words to express my delight to receive yours as the first reply of mine.
monokakau
Nov 15, 2013
Research Papers / my Research Paper on High School Drop Outs P.S. I am one. Thanks [3]
i have been reading your work and i think you really have the ability in writing despite some mistakes such as wrong form of verbs,no meaning sentence because of pretty complexity.
Here is some
In order to lower the high schooldrop out rates, that are negatively effecting America, the education system must consider alternative schooling methods and easier access to after school activities.
dropout Not drop out
One Laura Simmons, a Social Research Specialist at UNC Charlotte Urban Institute and the director of the Charlotte Regional Indicators Project, notes her own astounding research on the impact every high school drop out has on society:
One??? is it really? i do not understand why one + name
A report by Samantha Kane Salvador, M.A., for the Larry King Foundation of Building Children's Futures, gives a detailed report of what occurrences are common predictors for future high school dropouts
Two words " report'' in one setence i assume you may replace it by account or commentary
According to Russell Rumberger, a Professor of Education in Santa Barbraand focuses most of his time on understanding and helping high school drop outs, minorities make a majority of poverty stricken areas where early adolescent education centers are not up to par because of the lack of funds they are provided to establish their faculty (Rumberg P. 9)
I think it is ''who focuses''
This than creates a minority among those less gifted and devaluation of oneselfif their not performing to a schools high expectations.
in general your writing is quite good with deep knowledge but sometimes i feel if some idea you express too long.
your writing is not just one i correct but more important i have to learn much from you ,your way of using variable words,structure and acurrate quote
if you are not consent about mine you can freely express i am not very good and i am in my way to learn how to be better.
thank u for all
i have been reading your work and i think you really have the ability in writing despite some mistakes such as wrong form of verbs,no meaning sentence because of pretty complexity.
Here is some
In order to lower the high school
dropout Not drop out
One??? is it really? i do not understand why one + name
A report by Samantha Kane Salvador, M.A., for the Larry King Foundation of Building Children's Futures, gives a detailed report of what occurrences are common predictors for future high school dropouts
Two words " report'' in one setence i assume you may replace it by account or commentary
According to Russell Rumberger, a Professor of Education in Santa Barbra
I think it is ''who focuses''
This than creates a minority among those less gifted and devaluation of oneself
in general your writing is quite good with deep knowledge but sometimes i feel if some idea you express too long.
your writing is not just one i correct but more important i have to learn much from you ,your way of using variable words,structure and acurrate quote
if you are not consent about mine you can freely express i am not very good and i am in my way to learn how to be better.
thank u for all
monokakau
Nov 14, 2013
Writing Feedback / if it should be parents who choose the partner of their children [5]
Arranged marriage has been a controversial issue up to now.Some people hold beliefs that parents should choose the spouse for their children while others vehemently disapprove.From my point of wiew there being strongly resonable rationales why it should not be the parents but the bride/groom having right to choose their life-mate.
To begin with, an arranged married with not much knowing about other's character easily leads to incompatibilities in marital life.Because the bride/groom holds out much expectations for each other,they properly disappoint when encoutering weaknesses during daily life.There may be other cases of the life-mates without a lot of meetings before wedding, hardly have they realized how different they are.As a result in marriage life they are not able to find a mutual understanding.Futher more,from time to time the couple especially the women although do not have a bissful marriage but having to suffer for the family's respect ,pride and social prejudge.
Secondly,if people have to make the decision of their soulmate on their own they will have to try their best to make the marrige work.Having no one to blame in event of breakup because they have the chances and choices so that they have to intolerate of mistakes, weaknesses, try to share compassion feelings, listen undividedly to each other.This will virtually buid up a really firm marrige and the true reponsibility of the couple.
Finally, under the pressure of many factors, an arranged marriage is likely to transform into a marriage of convenience.This means the wedding is mainly built on fiancial,political or religious reasons.How difficult for a profound love to blossom in such cases.So without the passionate feeling of love, can a marriage be truly happy ?
On the other hand, others may claim that an arranged marrige free some couples from suffering strong protests of family members.In addition hardly have they worry about bad manner or financial problems because their parents usually take into account carefully.However,can a convenient marriage life make compensation for the true feeling in love?Futher more, some strongly approve of this marital life because it just have 0 to 7 % of divorce compared with 55 % of love marriage.However; do these statistics express the complete happy marriage?The couple having an arranged marriage are usually reluctant to break up because of pressure from family in spite of their annoying disappointment while who have a love marriage are more open-minded about the reason to marry and the necessity of divorce when the love is gone.
In conclusion, whereby these persuasive reasons, marrige should never depend predomantly on the parents' choice.To finding their right missing piece, people have to make their own decision and take invaluable advice from their experienced parents.
Arranged marriage has been a controversial issue up to now.Some people hold beliefs that parents should choose the spouse for their children while others vehemently disapprove.From my point of wiew there being strongly resonable rationales why it should not be the parents but the bride/groom having right to choose their life-mate.
To begin with, an arranged married with not much knowing about other's character easily leads to incompatibilities in marital life.Because the bride/groom holds out much expectations for each other,they properly disappoint when encoutering weaknesses during daily life.There may be other cases of the life-mates without a lot of meetings before wedding, hardly have they realized how different they are.As a result in marriage life they are not able to find a mutual understanding.Futher more,from time to time the couple especially the women although do not have a bissful marriage but having to suffer for the family's respect ,pride and social prejudge.
Secondly,if people have to make the decision of their soulmate on their own they will have to try their best to make the marrige work.Having no one to blame in event of breakup because they have the chances and choices so that they have to intolerate of mistakes, weaknesses, try to share compassion feelings, listen undividedly to each other.This will virtually buid up a really firm marrige and the true reponsibility of the couple.
Finally, under the pressure of many factors, an arranged marriage is likely to transform into a marriage of convenience.This means the wedding is mainly built on fiancial,political or religious reasons.How difficult for a profound love to blossom in such cases.So without the passionate feeling of love, can a marriage be truly happy ?
On the other hand, others may claim that an arranged marrige free some couples from suffering strong protests of family members.In addition hardly have they worry about bad manner or financial problems because their parents usually take into account carefully.However,can a convenient marriage life make compensation for the true feeling in love?Futher more, some strongly approve of this marital life because it just have 0 to 7 % of divorce compared with 55 % of love marriage.However; do these statistics express the complete happy marriage?The couple having an arranged marriage are usually reluctant to break up because of pressure from family in spite of their annoying disappointment while who have a love marriage are more open-minded about the reason to marry and the necessity of divorce when the love is gone.
In conclusion, whereby these persuasive reasons, marrige should never depend predomantly on the parents' choice.To finding their right missing piece, people have to make their own decision and take invaluable advice from their experienced parents.
