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Nov 15, 2013
Undergraduate / 'Moving my body' - USC Writing Supplement : activities [2]
Please tell me if the essay is too short or not academic enough. Any criticism will help!
In a short paragraph, please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences.
First, second, third, fourth, fifth position, arms and legs together. Simple movements one connected to the other in a flowing motion. Dance is to me, like oxygen is for any other person in the world, my body moves almost automatically, following the song, and my mind drifts away. It travels to a place where all my troubles fade, while my feet points and my leg lifts itself straight up into the air. After every hour of practice my body adjusts a little more, my leg lifts a little higher, my splits go a tad further, and my arms loosen. In every movement I express myself more, I let all my colors show and it comes to a point where my body speaks, my mouth, shut.
Please tell me if the essay is too short or not academic enough. Any criticism will help!
In a short paragraph, please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences.
First, second, third, fourth, fifth position, arms and legs together. Simple movements one connected to the other in a flowing motion. Dance is to me, like oxygen is for any other person in the world, my body moves almost automatically, following the song, and my mind drifts away. It travels to a place where all my troubles fade, while my feet points and my leg lifts itself straight up into the air. After every hour of practice my body adjusts a little more, my leg lifts a little higher, my splits go a tad further, and my arms loosen. In every movement I express myself more, I let all my colors show and it comes to a point where my body speaks, my mouth, shut.
