YatharthROCK
Nov 27, 2013
Writing Feedback / ESSAY ABOUT DREAM THEORIES; we have only brushed the surface [3]
I think the intro should be shorter; it leaves the reader waiting just a little bit too much. Also, --something meant for us but certainly not rooted within us-- doesn't seem to fit in well while reading.
Your transitions between different ideas were smooth. The ideas themselves compelled me to read on, but a little bit of your analysis of opinion would help. A last thing to say would be to beef up your conclusion a bit (make it more precise and proportional).
Great essay, srsly! (Especially considering such a long one could have gone awry so easily...)
I think the intro should be shorter; it leaves the reader waiting just a little bit too much. Also, --something meant for us but certainly not rooted within us-- doesn't seem to fit in well while reading.
Your transitions between different ideas were smooth. The ideas themselves compelled me to read on, but a little bit of your analysis of opinion would help. A last thing to say would be to beef up your conclusion a bit (make it more precise and proportional).
Great essay, srsly! (Especially considering such a long one could have gone awry so easily...)
