jackieelynnn
Nov 30, 2013
Undergraduate / 'Yearbooks and peers' - USC - Annenberg Statement of Intent [3]
Thank you so much for your feedback. Submitted today :)
Thank you so much for your feedback. Submitted today :)
jackieelynnn
Nov 28, 2013
Undergraduate / 'Yearbooks and peers' - USC - Annenberg Statement of Intent [3]
Prompt: Explain your reasons for pursuing an education and career in journalism or public relations
I wait for it every year - the moment my peers open up their yearbooks for the first time, their faces lighting up as they flip through the product I created. A feeling of satisfaction washes over me as I imagine them in 20 years, carrying those same yearbooks at our high school reunion. Journalism fuses my passion for English and my love for working with people, allowing me to serve my peers by commemorating significant events.
Not everyone knows me personally, but most recognize the girl with the huge DSLR camera at every school function, the girl rushing to get a quote from the homecoming queen immediately after the crowning, the girl who shamelessly eavesdrops on conversations and interrupts, asking 1) if anyone has pictures from the event they're talking about, and 2) if Yearbook or Newspaper have permission to feature it.
In the newsroom, after an event, I feel at home. With the touchdown that had the student section roaring still fresh in my mind, I let my fingers type away, pouring out the written word. I tamper with graphics until I've created the perfect design to showcase the night's highlights, and drop in the dominant photo I took a mere five feet away from the star quarterback. Through my eyes, my peers will relive the night and remember all its best moments. I hover my cursor over the submit button. Then I stop myself. There's no way it's perfect before the deadline. It never is.
Prompt: Explain your reasons for pursuing an education and career in journalism or public relations
I wait for it every year - the moment my peers open up their yearbooks for the first time, their faces lighting up as they flip through the product I created. A feeling of satisfaction washes over me as I imagine them in 20 years, carrying those same yearbooks at our high school reunion. Journalism fuses my passion for English and my love for working with people, allowing me to serve my peers by commemorating significant events.
Not everyone knows me personally, but most recognize the girl with the huge DSLR camera at every school function, the girl rushing to get a quote from the homecoming queen immediately after the crowning, the girl who shamelessly eavesdrops on conversations and interrupts, asking 1) if anyone has pictures from the event they're talking about, and 2) if Yearbook or Newspaper have permission to feature it.
In the newsroom, after an event, I feel at home. With the touchdown that had the student section roaring still fresh in my mind, I let my fingers type away, pouring out the written word. I tamper with graphics until I've created the perfect design to showcase the night's highlights, and drop in the dominant photo I took a mere five feet away from the star quarterback. Through my eyes, my peers will relive the night and remember all its best moments. I hover my cursor over the submit button. Then I stop myself. There's no way it's perfect before the deadline. It never is.
jackieelynnn
Nov 28, 2013
Undergraduate / Military contracting Firm; Common App USC- use your engineering degree to benefit society? [5]
This is a great start but I feel that it is undeveloped. You have 250 words, don't leave anything vague! Maybe elaborate on why you think society specifically needs the things you are addressing. Why a concentration on defense? Talk about maybe how you noticed these issues in society and why you want to remedy them. Good luck!
This is a great start but I feel that it is undeveloped. You have 250 words, don't leave anything vague! Maybe elaborate on why you think society specifically needs the things you are addressing. Why a concentration on defense? Talk about maybe how you noticed these issues in society and why you want to remedy them. Good luck!
jackieelynnn
Nov 28, 2013
Undergraduate / LEADERSHIP; Claremont Mckenna Athenaeum Essay - Dale Carnegie [3]
I've personally read How to Win Friends and Influence People and I think it's great, but I think this essay needs a bit more about who you are. Clearly you value Carnegie's advice but when you say it impacted you, show us how it did. Even though the essay is supposed to be about another person, you need to somehow show your leadership skills as well. Otherwise, the bit about Carnegie is very well written!
I've personally read How to Win Friends and Influence People and I think it's great, but I think this essay needs a bit more about who you are. Clearly you value Carnegie's advice but when you say it impacted you, show us how it did. Even though the essay is supposed to be about another person, you need to somehow show your leadership skills as well. Otherwise, the bit about Carnegie is very well written!