minepour
Dec 5, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 - Should we judge people by their appearance? [9]
Hi everybody. This is my first essay on EF. Could you give me some feedbacks about task response and coherence?
Thank you so much.
Topic: "We are able to judge people by their appearance. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?"
There are many different approaches which make us able to judge people without knowing before. One of the simplest ways is judging the appearance of people as most people do it regularly. The accuracy of these judgments depend on many factors such as condition and position of person who we want to know. But in some occasions these judgements might work out and may be useful.
In my point of view, judging the people who are new for us is almost difficult, even though we cannot overlook the strong effects of some people during first meeting. But in such situation we should be patient and wait to look other characteristics in order to find more information. Some people get good prepared before first meetings so they will be attend with high confidence which It might make a unreal environments for other people who are here.
In other hand, this approach for judging about people who we know them for more than one time is more applicable. For example, we could mention the co-workers. We almost know them regarding their behaviors and characteristics but we can grape more information about him by paying more attention to their appearances such as clothes, hairs, shaving, shoes and etc. We could find that what happened for him or her before coming to work or how her or his status of mental and spirit is.
Finally, I think people judgments based on appearance is a suitable way to find some information about people, but it is not enough to make final decision. We need to consider other properties of a person to ensure how he or she is. Also we should care about that, sometimes appropriate appearances deviate our mind from the true way, however using such judgment are beneficial when we almost know the person who is supposed.
Hi everybody. This is my first essay on EF. Could you give me some feedbacks about task response and coherence?
Thank you so much.
Topic: "We are able to judge people by their appearance. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?"
There are many different approaches which make us able to judge people without knowing before. One of the simplest ways is judging the appearance of people as most people do it regularly. The accuracy of these judgments depend on many factors such as condition and position of person who we want to know. But in some occasions these judgements might work out and may be useful.
In my point of view, judging the people who are new for us is almost difficult, even though we cannot overlook the strong effects of some people during first meeting. But in such situation we should be patient and wait to look other characteristics in order to find more information. Some people get good prepared before first meetings so they will be attend with high confidence which It might make a unreal environments for other people who are here.
In other hand, this approach for judging about people who we know them for more than one time is more applicable. For example, we could mention the co-workers. We almost know them regarding their behaviors and characteristics but we can grape more information about him by paying more attention to their appearances such as clothes, hairs, shaving, shoes and etc. We could find that what happened for him or her before coming to work or how her or his status of mental and spirit is.
Finally, I think people judgments based on appearance is a suitable way to find some information about people, but it is not enough to make final decision. We need to consider other properties of a person to ensure how he or she is. Also we should care about that, sometimes appropriate appearances deviate our mind from the true way, however using such judgment are beneficial when we almost know the person who is supposed.
