Graduate / SoP for MS Computer Engineering in a US University [6]

Hi
Please review my SoP and give your comments
By the way, I am a graduate of electrical engineering, having a telecommunications engineering experence for 13 years.
I do not have strong GPA, and I do bad in TOEFL :)

SoP for MS Computer Engineering in a US University

Please let me introduce myself. I am a graduate of electrical engineering since May 2000, and a telecommunications engineer in the telecommunications department in an Electricity Utility Company from June 2000 to July 2013. More information about my experience could be found in my resume.

It has been my ambition since graduation to pursue my post graduate studies in engineering. But duo to I had a family and I was working to secure an income, and duo to that there is only one engineering college in my city and that there were only a few seats for admitted students, I couldn't make it at that time.

I believe that this lateness was good for me. In these thirteen years, I earned experience and knowledge in telecommunications, networking and computer systems. In addition to that, I was closely related to the power grid systems and its auxiliary systems. These elaborate and develop a clear vision for my future career to be an information and communication technology specialist in power grid. The post graduate studies is the main enabler to this vision.

I want to specialize in computer engineering for three reasons. First, I earned a hands-on experience and knowledge in telecommunications and networking systems, network management systems, computer-telephony systems and applications. Second, I have a thorough knowledge in power grid systems and its auxiliary systems which I experience closely related that computer systems are highly involved in power grid in different levels. Third, since I attended the first workshop that [my country name] Electricity and Cogeneration Regulatory Authority arranged in October 2012 for the master plan of Smart Meters/Smart Grid in [my country], I am highly interested in the Smart Grid. I read the documents that the US DoE published about it, the Scotland 2020 vision for Smart Grid, and many academic papers that focus in the use of information and communication technology to achieve the goal of modernizing the grid to be Smart. I also attended the training workshop in Smart Grid in University of California - Los Angeles in March 2013.

I am aspiring now to study master's degree in computer engineering so I could be a specialist in information and communication technology to participate with the professional community to engineer and design the telecommunications, networking and computer systems to help achieve the goal of modernizing the power grid to be Smart Grid. For such an example, this specialty will enable me to understand the mechanism of cloud computing and virtualization that is suitable for the new business model that the Smart Grid will create for the energy services to industrial and residential sectors. Another example is applying information security systems, applications and procedures to secure this future digital power grid.

I had explored the program of the MS in Computer Science and Engineering in [US University] and I found it in line with my goals. I even found a master's program in Sustainable Energy and I found a course in introduction to smart grid, which means that the University is interested in Smart Grid, which means I could benefit from this and study some courses from this program as electives or attending it by listening; if it is allowed.

I am pleased to apply for the MS Computer Science and Engineering in [US University] to study in spring or summer semester. I am ready for any conditions that it is required to get the acceptance.

Yours Sincerely

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Graduate / Letter to faculty professor about applying for MS Computer Engineering [4]

Hi

I have a letter to be sent to the director of computer science and engineering department. I already applied through the university online system, but I want to impress the proffessor who is in charge of the department. I didn't find the program coordinator and the university is not large ( Santa Clara Univeristy , California ) , so the only way left for me is to go directly to the director.

I am an Electrical engineer who is applying for MS Computer Engineering, and I graduated in 2000. I don't have strong GPA and even my TOEFL score is bad ( 61 ), so because of that I feel that I should impress the right guy in the faculty and I hope that the department director is the right person.

By the way, SoP wasn't required for application, so I didn't submit one.

Thanks

The letter:

Dear Sir
Greetings

I am pleased to introduce myself as an applicant to the Master of Science degree in computer science and engineering program. I hold a bachelor of engineering degree in electrical engineering and I worked as a telecommunications engineer in a power utility company for 13 years.

I am applying for computer engineering program because of two reasons; the first is the fact that telecommunications and data networks are now integrated and closely related, and the second is computer systems is highly used in monitoring and controlling of power grid and the management of operations.

My vision is to be an ICT (Information and Communications Technology) specialist that design and engineer the information infrastructure of the modernized power grid that is so called the Smart Grid; the data networks, wireless networks, wireless sensor networks, telecommunications , cloud computing and data centers, network management systems , security issues in different levels of the information infrastructure.

I read through the curriculum of the program and I found it suitable and in line with my goals. And I found other courses that I could take them as electives such as ELEN 285, COEN 250 and CENG 217 if it is allowed.

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