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Name: Kayla Simmons
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knsimmons13   
Jan 9, 2014
Undergraduate / 'innate curiosity of mine' NC State statement about major choice [6]

I think that you have a good start and I like your brief anecdote. I think that "belongings" is less descriptive than "household electronics and tools" and think you could put "electronics and household items" or something to that extent. Also, maybe try to take always out of the first and second sentence and just use it in one and use a different word. Just some suggestions! I think you have a great idea overall!
knsimmons13   
Jan 9, 2014
Undergraduate / "Reporting like Ron"; Pepperdine Suppl [4]

I like your overall theme and idea. I think that you could improve your response by cutting out some of the summary information about "Anchorman" and write more about the significance of basing the course on the idea of "Anchorman". In my opinion, the sentence about the second movie seems unnecessary. My editing is just a suggestion and I think you did a great job overall. I hope my input is helpful!

Welcome to "Reporting like Ron"; a journalism course at Pepperdine University inspired by the hit blockbuster movie series "Anchorman". Ron Burgundy, the main character of the movie, is a famous anchorman from a San Diego news station. Burgundy is known for his salon quality hair and cutting edge reporting. He believes that reporting what people need to hear is boring and that news should be fun. In his second movie, he changes journalism, as we know it by reporting about why Americans should be proud of being Americans, as well as reporting the very first live car chase . In this class we will be focusing on our skills as creative reporters, rather than the news itself. We will be reporting on local news and focusing(maybe a different word than focusing since you used in it the previous sentence) on honing the skills that will help us think "outside of the box." By reporting news occurring in our own area, local news, we will be eliminating (eliminate)any extra steps that involve becoming familiar with the area, people and culturefamiliarization. . This will help us focus more on the story and presenting it in a more creative way. The course will give students a break from their more rigorous courses and co curricular experiences. This will also give them a chance to stimulate the more creative half of their brain. We hope that this course will also help them in courses throughout their academic career and in everyday life. In "Reporting like Ron" we strive to open our student's mind and create a more creative learning environment, every idea is welcome as well as supportive criticism.
knsimmons13   
Jan 2, 2014
Graduate / My patience, enthusiasm and flexibility ; SOP Speech Pathology [4]

SOP for Speech Pathology Graduate Program. It can only be 500 words and there was not a direct prompt. It's a little over 500 words. Please let me know what you think, if there are errors or if you think I should change anything about to improve it. All comments and advice is appreciated! Thank you so much! I just really want feed back and grammar review!

I cringed as he threw himself to the floor in an uncontrollable tantrum for the third time in the past hour. Aiden was constantly having difficulty interacting with the other children at preschool; he demanded personal space, exhibited difficulties with sensory integration and struggled with effective communication. While I saw a sweet and intelligent, yet overstimulated four year old boy attempting to navigate the world-others did not. Despite my efforts to incorporate educational exercises and play activities to facilitate language and communication, Aiden continued to struggle and isolate himself. As his preschool teacher with a bachelor's in psychology, all I was able to offer Aiden was emotional support and to me that just was not enough. I wanted to make a concrete difference and equip him with the language skills he needed to connect with his peers and the rest of the world.

My experience with Aiden sparked my interest in speech language pathology. After extensive research and interviews, I knew that I found my calling. I have always known that my dream career would be helping others and working with Aiden not only reinforced this belief but showed me exactly what I want to help others with: communication. I applied to COLLEGE NAME and enrolled in post baccalaureate courses to complete the equivalent of a B.S. in Speech Language Pathology to expand my knowledge and prepare for graduate school. Every class, conference and observation I have attended solidifies my passion for the field as I look forward to a rewarding yet challenging career as an SLP.

I am confident in my ability to excel as a graduate student and become a successful SLP. Communication has not only been a consistent area of interest of mine throughout my academic career, but also an aspect of life I am confident in. My current and past positions have heavily relied on my ability to communicate. I truly understand the significance of communication and it drives my desire to help others achieve confidence in their abilities. My bachelor's in psychology has provided me with a heightened insight into the emotional and psychological aspect of communication which in addition to my compassionate personality will allow me to connect with others in therapy on a deeper level. My position as a preschool teacher is a constant reminder of the joy I experience serving others. My patience, enthusiasm and flexibility are essential to keeping children engaged and motivated throughout the day and are crucial skills I can utilize when working with clients in the future, regardless of age of therapy setting.

My personal attributes, work ethic and passion for the field make me an ideal candidate for GRADUATE SCHOOL's program. I am excited to gain experience in both medical and school settings and have the opportunity to work in the Center for Communication with a variety of clients. The unique bond between faculty and students at SCHOOL is especially appealing to me. I strongly believe that a one on one environment is beneficial to both intellectual and professional growth and would be honored to be a part of SCHOOL's program.
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