Writing Feedback / How technology affected the types of relationships people make? [4]

In a way, technology has helped, even when it seems like it was never even involved.
Since the glorious technology of recording has been invented, people all over the world have been able to connect on a different, more intimate level, because they share similar interests in music.

Without some of this technology, we might have never progressed, and world peace will have never even been in sight.
Music gives everyone a feelgood mindset, and depending on which genre it is, people share their interests with other people, and so forth.

Undergraduate / 'Becoming a doctor' / 'Body language' -Tufts Supplemental Essays [5]

It's great if you saw both perspectives of an argument, but it's preferred to look at the unpopular view most. So you can write a paragraph on the most favored side, and write two or three paragraphs on the not-so-favored side.

Remember, they care about different perspective!
And what do you mean by personal language?