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Name: Mohammed Alani
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motwera   
Jan 11, 2014
Grammar, Usage / Small grammar confusion: SOP [3]

I don't for sure what exactly you want on how to fix it, but here is what I think you should add:

1). research and innovation has been always been a fundamental theme of my academic endeavours.
2). research and innovation have been always been a fundamental theme of my academic endeavours.
That is you are talking in past tense, but you could remove the been if it isn't past tense.

Also, you could choose the one that seems more correct, or listen to those more experienced in the forums.
motwera   
Jan 11, 2014
Essays / How to write an personal essay about against the criticism against gaming in general? [2]

I have been trying to find a good topic to present for the personal essay, at a Canadian highschool, the teacher told us to make a personal essay presentation and a written component about it, that may sound easy, but I have been struggling to where I begin for a good option to present the essay, in addition to for a good written component of it

Looking at that particular topic, I found out that the media seem to really hate violence in video games, as an excuse to downgrade the reputation of video games, while violence in other media is almost the same or worse, including the controversial guy (Jack Thompson) who ranted and tried to do everything that could affect video games in a negative manner without considering those who play violent video games, and how it may affect those who play it, verses those who have heard about it. In addition, it seems that most who blame video games are the mainstream media, with the usual bandwagon and money cashing to paint a negative and un-supportive image of video games as whole.

Teacher's instructions:
A creative format to demonstrate the elements of a personal essay. You must create a unified argument, exploring a thesis in a presentation format. The presentation should be approximately 2-4 minutes.

- Civil disobedience is a powerful force of social change, but is breaking the rules acceptable in order to change the rules we disagree with? ( Persuasive)

The written component should include an identification and explanation of:

- Thesis (either stated or implied; not necessarily at the beginning of the essay)
- Tone
- Audience
- Purpose
At least 3 stylistic/literary/rhetorical devices (you may use metaphors two or three times but it will only count as one literary device)
Options:
- Rant
- Lost Generation Palindrome video
- The Story of Stuff
- Podcast (both audio and visual)
- Visual/Photo Essay
- Song/Video , Songshadow (Parody)
- Bitstrip or Comic_Life (Comic and audio)
- Analogy Speech (comparing abstract ideas to tangible ideas, ex. Society to Perfect Recipe)
- A topic of your choosing (to be approved by your teacher)