Letters / Letter to Director of Financial Aid [7]

I am submitting this essay in dire need of an expert to help me out. I am looking for grammar errors and comments on what I could do or even if I should submit this letter. For your (chosen expert) this letter will be sent to the Director of Financial Aid at my community college in North Carolina asking for the reinstatement of my reward. If this letter requires proper headings or ending please advise me of those.

My name is Chelisa Kearney. I am a 20 year old single mother and up until about 5 months ago I was a recipient of Financial Aid, through Vance Granville Community College. My major was Information System Security. A major I chose because of my excellent computer skills and the prospective income that the degree offered. The reasons for the revocation of the funds was due to the fact that my percentage for credits taken and credits earned were at a 41% and needed to be at least 67%. This was described in a letter from you all stating that the credits I attempted (52) and the credits I earned (28) were at an unbalanced rate. This letter to you is an attempt to explain my extenuating circumstances, in hopes of having my funds reinstated.

Beginning in June 2006, I graduated early at the top 20% of my class at Warren County High School. After graduation my plans were to go to college and complete 2 years for an Associates Degree, but as life has its own plans I became pregnant in July 06'. Even though, I chose to keep my child because of beliefs. I, also, chose not to continue schooling on hopes of attending VGCC to obtain my degree. While I was looking forward to attend, I prepped myself to only take online courses based on the fact that my mother is disabled and that no one in my immediate household held transportation. I first applied for financial aid in Fall 06'. That semester I completed all 5 classes with nothing less than a B. In Spring 2007 I set my goal to try and complete another successful semester, even though, by then the due date was March 9. Not wanting to give up so easily I attended and completed the work in online and on campus classes as long as I could bare. By the time February came I was submitting emails of withdrawal from my classes. Not knowing the procedure for this type of situation, a known policy of some sort would have been my ultimate process. Instead, I withdrew before the before the deadline and received "WP"s in all of those classes. My next registration with VGCC was in Fall 07'. In all honestly these classes, the last of the bunch for my major, were taken in haste of trying to apply before the registration deadline. Not knowing, at the time, that my reward could be rolled over for at least two semesters giving me a multitude of different classes to choose from. In the quickness it took me to apply for these classes, I quickly realized that these were all writing intensive courses. Undoubtedly, require much research, many pages of essays and a lot of devoted time and, for me, courses that would definitely need to be taken in the presence of teacher in the comfort of a classroom. If it is to any constellation I apologize for the selflessness with which I used the system in choosing my courses. I learned my mistake and attempted and completed three more courses toward my degree.

I understand and acknowledge why my reward was revoked. I read and understood that I had to keep my criteria in check. Also, in acknowledgement I would like for you to know that I am a striving student who allows has been and always will be. When I attended VGCC I did my very best to attain all that I could and give all that I could. I am not a bad person or even a dropout. I am just someone who made little mistakes and one who has learned a valuable lesson on reading and upholding collegiate procedures and policies. People have opportunities in life that they give up without knowing the consequences. Coincidentally I know the consequences. Therefore, with your possible forgiveness my opportunities from here on out will be dealt with both wisely and sensibly. And with the conclusion of this letter my status is solely in your hands. I appreciate and thank you for this chance for allowing me to write this letter.

An Ambitious Student