danish_ali
Jan 24, 2014
Undergraduate / ILLEGAL DRUGS; **UWC PAKISTAN** ; Current problem in Pakistan [7]
Thank you for the comments.I Re-edited the essay. Is this one some better??
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Terrorism, Genocide, Corruption, Inflation & Energy crisis. these are the biggest issue which our nation is suffering through right now,Judging by coverage garnered in the media. Markus Zusak said: "Big things are often just little things that people notice" Personally, the 'little thing' I noticed which plagues this country and doesn't receive any special attention; neither from higher-ups nor from general public was this.
3 years ago, when I got admission in a popular public school',because of my devolping interest in 'Psychological Studies', I started trying to observe and understand our diverse mooded community. Based on analysis of my friends who hailed from different economic classes, I stumbled across a shocking revelation. Drugs could be the next big threat to the reputation and well-being of Pakistani society. In particular, the widespread usage and extremely easy access to drugs by teenagers.
According to my personal experience and analysis, at least 4 out of every 100 high school students have direct links to weed and alcohol dealers/hotspots. Its popularity has increased at such an extent that I have been witness to students taking up 'hash' in classrooms while hiding it inside their geometry boxes, pen-caps, wallets etc. A huge proportion of our 'new' generation has fallen victim to this evil.
Lackadaisical gaurdians are prime factor for the spread of this curse. As majority of its victims are those who don't get enough attention from parents and are regularly mistreated or even insulted in some instances by teachers. Thus a thirst to be 'accepted' and 'desired' by their peers drives them to this practice.
Banning the Shisha cafes was an appreciable step by Govt. as these places had an important role in encouraging drug community but it hasn`t been completely effective due to rampant corruption among the Police force. Counseling facilities and a massive campaign for public awareness should be immediately set up. Secondly, Government should regulate zero-tolerance policies for finding and closing of places promoting such practices. Teachers should be encouraged to focus on all students equally. Teenagers should be encouraged to devote their youthful energy to healthy avenues such as sports instead of dabbling in injurious practices such as these.
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Thank you for the comments.I Re-edited the essay. Is this one some better??
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Terrorism, Genocide, Corruption, Inflation & Energy crisis. these are the biggest issue which our nation is suffering through right now,Judging by coverage garnered in the media. Markus Zusak said: "Big things are often just little things that people notice" Personally, the 'little thing' I noticed which plagues this country and doesn't receive any special attention; neither from higher-ups nor from general public was this.
3 years ago, when I got admission in a popular public school',because of my devolping interest in 'Psychological Studies', I started trying to observe and understand our diverse mooded community. Based on analysis of my friends who hailed from different economic classes, I stumbled across a shocking revelation. Drugs could be the next big threat to the reputation and well-being of Pakistani society. In particular, the widespread usage and extremely easy access to drugs by teenagers.
According to my personal experience and analysis, at least 4 out of every 100 high school students have direct links to weed and alcohol dealers/hotspots. Its popularity has increased at such an extent that I have been witness to students taking up 'hash' in classrooms while hiding it inside their geometry boxes, pen-caps, wallets etc. A huge proportion of our 'new' generation has fallen victim to this evil.
Lackadaisical gaurdians are prime factor for the spread of this curse. As majority of its victims are those who don't get enough attention from parents and are regularly mistreated or even insulted in some instances by teachers. Thus a thirst to be 'accepted' and 'desired' by their peers drives them to this practice.
Banning the Shisha cafes was an appreciable step by Govt. as these places had an important role in encouraging drug community but it hasn`t been completely effective due to rampant corruption among the Police force. Counseling facilities and a massive campaign for public awareness should be immediately set up. Secondly, Government should regulate zero-tolerance policies for finding and closing of places promoting such practices. Teachers should be encouraged to focus on all students equally. Teenagers should be encouraged to devote their youthful energy to healthy avenues such as sports instead of dabbling in injurious practices such as these.
