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Name: Abi A
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Last Post: Feb 14, 2014
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Abi90   
Feb 14, 2014
Writing Feedback / Solutions to improve public health. [6]

Thank you so much for your comments, will concentrate on the point you mentioned going further.
Abi90   
Feb 12, 2014
Writing Feedback / Solutions to improve public health. [6]

Please help me by providing some feedback on my essay

Some people says that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however say that this would have little impact on public health and the other measures are required.

Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Citizen's well-being is often considered as nation's well-being. But general public health is declining these days,
and there are many possible solutions for this worrying trend. Few claims that one among such solutions
is to have more number of sports clubs.

There is no doubt that the physical fitness keeps one healthy and active. Taking some time out
for any sort of outdoor game is a good exercise for human body.But most of the people are failed to take part
in sports, it may be due to the busier life style and the distance of the sports Centers from their neighborhood.
Increasing the number of sports club in different areas may encourage people to participate in sports
in their local sports club ,with out worrying much about time and distance.

However, there is an argument that most of the sports club's are often charges too much, and it not affordable
to every one.Considering this situation, expanding sports centers is not alone the complete solution to
improve public health. Other alternatives such as, taking a brisk walk for 30 mins daily is a good form
of exercise with plenty of benefits . In addition to that, performing house holds things on a daily basis also
brings positive effects to our body .And also Government should conduct some health campaigns
explaining the importance of proper diet and regular exercises for a balanced life. Some people
are more interested in variety of exercises by neglecting the diet, this will also have unhealthy benefits.

Having discussed different sort of solutions to avoid unhealthy life style, I would say increasing
the number of sports clubs is not a full fledged solution to the problem.
Abi90   
Jan 28, 2014
Writing Feedback / One Official international Language or more languages? [6]

Hi,
I'm new to this forum. I'm very much looking forward to have feedback on my essay. Please help me.

Some people believe that there should be a single official international language. Others believe that there should be more than one such languages.
Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Official international language has always been a debatable issue when the people are expressing their views about different international languages. Some says unique official language would be beneficial for the people and nations where as others contradicts with this idea. Both the views has it's own merits and demerits as outlined below.

An official language is essential to communicate with the people across the world, having only one such language serves this purpose effectively. Considering the example of international summits, where the delegates from different countries have the opportunity to discuss their thoughts on any prevailing issue in the world. In such cases , language which is used by all the officials should be unique so that there is no situation where the people face difficulties in understanding the topic or situation.

In addition to that, people who wants to visit different countries on their own interest may also have problems if the language in that nation is not known to him or her.For instance , a group of friends who are on their holiday trip to a place out of their motherland can enjoy and explore the things more over there by having a proper guide who speaks a common language than his native.Having the people who are speaking common language also helps in attracting tourists from different countries which in turn increases nation's economy.

On the other hand, there is a school of thought that believes different languages have different identities and they speaks about the culture and tradition. Having only one official international language may erode such things.To illustrate, there are some some chantings in an Asian language , which speaks about the origin, rituals and the tradition. It gives the great sense of nativity if we one can read those as it is than in any converted versions.There is also a concern that, having exposed to foreign language much more may put in local languages in endanger.So the people may oppose the view of unique official international language.

Having explained the merits and demerits of both the views, in my opinion I believe it is better to have unique official language by giving enough importance to

local languages.
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