Writing Feedback / TOEFL: supporting sports and social activities Vs supporting the libraries [4]

Sports and social activities are as important as the libraries

These days, there is an issue about whether the universities should invest their money on extracurricular activities. Some people might think that college shouldn't support social activities and sports equally because they believe that making student knowledgeable should be priority for university. I, however, believe that it is necessary for universities to support the extra-activities as well, unlike pessimistic viewpoint of spending money on those activities.

First of all, when it comes to creativity, taking part in social activities is expected to be meaningful. In this complex world, many students are trying hard to become more creative and they believe participating in sports and social activities is a key solution. According to research conducted by Harvard University, researcher succeed in proving that people who join the social club and sports activities tend to be more creative by dividing people in two to group. People in the group A were told to take apart in soccer club in their university, whereas students in the group B weren't.

Volunteering people were all assigned to take national creativity measuring examination, namely NCME. Result was very surprising, students' score in the group A far exceed students belonged to group B. head researcher of this project goes on to say that sports and social activities have positive influence on right side of the brain which plays significant role in thinking out of box. This clearly indicates it is worth for universities to support the activities such as soccer, social clubs.

On top of that, as to relationship, joining social activities is very important. As the world is getting colder, university students find it difficult to making new friends. On this occasion, college increasing the social clubs may come in handy. For instance, when i first entered the Korean national university, i had little chance to talk with other students because there was no such thing like social club in my college. Fortunately, since university committee decided to spend more money to make social clubs, i could make a lot of friends and had wonderful college life.

However, it is undeniable that duty of university is teaching students. So i also agree universities should make efforts to enhance the education and improve the libraries. Despite this, it is totally ridiculous to treat sports and social activities unequally.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL - Now we have so many sources of news and information [5]

TOPIC: Now we have so many sources of news and information that we cannot tell which one is the real one or who is telling the truth. (Media）

Generally speaking, I believe that it is impossible for people to discern which source is the real one or who is telling the lie, especially, when it comes to digital media such as internet, television.

First of all, it is undeniable fact that government's inference in the social media is considerable, which makes the truth vague. But I should admit that this is not always the case. However, government does often try to conceal the truth that does harms to them. To give you an idea, here is one good example, South Korea. It is well-known that South Korea is ferocious country; they get rid of all the politicians who are against the government and dictator. Unfortunately, people in the country are not aware of those facts. It is the government that distorts the truth that has possibility of instigating the people to fight off the government. When we see the television broadcasting in South korea, they always portray the good side and good events in their country, which makes people blind to the truth. This clear shows that sometimes people find it impossible to tell apart between the truth and the lie.

On top of that, it is true that with the development of internet, the sources flooded into our society. Therefore, people naturally started to have access to that tremendous amount of information. However, the problem is that not all the information on the internet is reliable. According to research conducted by Carolina University, researchers discovered that more than 46.5%of information posted on the famous website like Google, Yahoo is not credible. The head of the project goes on to say that this is because unlike the past, in present even the people who are not expertise in a certain field can voice their opinion with the advent of new media. This make people confused whether to believe or not. This indicates that due to the emergence of internet, people became less discernible when they look for trustful information and resources.