Writing Feedback / [Ielts task 1] Fish and Meat consumption in Europe from 1979 to 2004 [7]

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A glance at the graph provided reveals the quantities of fish and meats consumed in a European country from 1979 to 2004. Overall, it is evident that while the number of fish consumed remained quite steady, the firgures for three kinds of meats experienced considerable fluctuations.

The consumption of beef and lamb saw some similar trends: they both witnessed downward fluctuations. The quantities of it in 2004 were less than approximately 100 (grams per person per week) compared to their number in 1979. Beginning with more than 200 grams per person per week in 1979, beef consumption peak at nearly 250 grams in 1984 before remaining quite stable between 1984 and 1989 then decreased constantly to just about100 grams per person per week in 2004. Similarly, the quantity of lamb consumption declined gradually from 150 grams to around 60 grams per person per week in 2004.

In contrast, the number of chicken consumed by individuals per week increase gradually from less than 150 grams to nearly 250 grams, which make it become the highest number of meat consumption in 2004. By 2004, the much higher quantity of chicken consumption in comparison with the consumption of beef, lamb and fish.

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