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Posts by angel8713
Name: neha sharma
Joined: Mar 1, 2014
Last Post: Mar 3, 2014
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angel8713   
Mar 3, 2014
Writing Feedback / WHAT IMPORTANT SKILL A PERSON MUST HAVE TO BE SUCCESSFUL - TOEFL ESSAY EVALUTION [5]

Intro- expertise him in any given field.There should be a comma after further.
first paragraph- can make a person's learning aspects faster.
help him to adapt in difficult environment not to get adapted to any difficult environment.
Use helps not help's
Ideas and expressions of ideas are good but there are some more grammatical errors.
regards,
neha
angel8713   
Mar 3, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Should we spend our lives doing the same things and avoiding changes? [2]

IELTS TOPIC-Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In this electronic age,advanced technology and modernized world has imposed several modifications in human life.Everybody has to keep in pace with alterations to survive in this universe.This is because people who deny to accept changes are considered orthodox in the society and experienced various consequences.I personally believe that change is the law of nature and it has become essential for every individual to modify their life style for personal development and future prospectus.

First advantage of adopting variations in life is that it makes the life comfortable and ease the performance of tasks.For example,sewing clothes was a manual job in the primitive world.But,invention of sewing machine provided an option for tailors to achieve their targets within a short interval of time and in a convenient manner with mechanical assistance of machine.

Another advantage is that changes open new opportunities and bring out hidden talents of an individual.Moreover,it enables the human to live with excitement and joy.To cite an example,some companies exchange the roles of employees within the organisation and enables them to hold different job positions so that they can experience a variety of work under a common roof and excel their talents.Thus,it makes the employees active and they enjoy their roles.However,workers engaged in similar kind of roles becomes receptive in nature.In addition,repetitive activities and same kind of working environment inculcates dullness among them.

On the other hand,it is a saying that experience makes the man perfect.From others people's perspective,changes produce insecurity and more chances of failure.Conversely, familiarity with work increase self confidences and reduces chances of failure.Taking this into consideration,people like to indulge themselves at same job positions for several years.Even,they establish a regular routine in their life schedule.In this way,they expertise themselves in a particular field.

Overall, it is not right to say that changes are always wrong or right.It depends upon the individuals how they inculcate them in life.A small change can twist a person's life abruptly.Therefore,it is in a man's hand to select the changes because a positive change can make the life of a person whereas a negative change can deteriorates it.
angel8713   
Mar 1, 2014
Writing Feedback / Money for space exploration? Government should spent more on space research [3]

Taxpayers Should Spend Money on Space Exploration



Space exploration has become a debatable issue. Some people considers exploration of the universe appreciating due to its outstanding inventions for energy resources,technology and land for human comfort.However,other people contraindicates and conform this act as a wastage of wealth.In my opinion, planetary exploration is worthwhile as discussed in the following passages.

Firstly, increasing population has resulted into less space on earth for human use. This continuous reduction in land on our plane has drive interest of scientists to find out life on other planets. Mars exploration to detect origin of life is a very suitable example to illustrate this point. In this way, exploration of space is not a novelty, it is a necessity to ascertain alternatives for human problems.

Another important factor that makes expenditure of money on space exploration programmes is shortage of energy resources. Advancement in technology and population explosion has brought sudden decline in our valuable sources of power on earth .Thus, availability of these resources from other planets would be the only option available for human when energy stock get vanished on earth. In this way, expenditure of money today on space exploration would provide immense benefits to future generations.

On the other hand, a substantial amount of money would be wasted on a unsuccessful project .However, this money could be used in a productive manner by spending for the welfare of mankind. For example, people are dying with complex health problems, poor housing and poverty. Government should give more concern to these issues rather than wasting the time and money on space exploration project that are of no use for people.

At last but not least, every leap is the history of failures that has no publicity. Therefore, man should not stop research and move on with faith as merits of space exploration outweigh its demerits. Moreover ,exploration of space find out the alternatives to eradicate the life threatening situations.In this way, spending money to combat present problems of public will only assist them to sustain life in current situation whereas expenditure on determining the possible solutions via research would make whole life better. Therefore, government should spent large portion of budget on space research.
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