Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing: Qualities for Becoming Successful Can't Learn At A University? [6]

Dear all, I am preparing for the IELTS test and I need your feedback to this essay.

The qualities a person needs to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at university or any similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In my opinion, I disagree with the ideas expressed above. Conversely, I believe that higher education is a proper way to equip youngsters with needed qualities to be successful.

First of all, it is only in universities could young people learn professional knowledge, which is the cornerstone of their successful career. The education in university has covered a wide range of curriculum, from engineering to humanities, from social sciences to marketing and finance. For example, if a student wants to be an excellent lawyer, he could only learn the branches of laws and regulations systematically in law classes and develops his discussion skills through class activities and case studies. Without tutor's guidance, it would be extremely difficult for him to pursue a career in law firm.

Along with professional knowledge, social networks or so called personal relationship, is another key factor contributing to people's achievements. This network could be easily established during your undergraduate & postgraduate studies. Most of your classmates are likely to develop a same career as you after graduation. Therefore, their are good resources when you ask for help. Meanwhile, through extra-curriculum activities, such as parties and volunteer works, your communication skills will be improved and you are already capable with teamwork abilities when hunting for a job.

Last of all, some personalities and attitudes could be adopted in universities. It is well-known that successful people not only have high IQ, but also have some personal characteristics that differ from ordinary people-- single mindedness, self-discipline and perservance, for example. Those characters could be developed during your studies by doing a long-term project, restricting your behaviors before an exam and solving a complicated question.

In conclusion, I think higher education could provide students with all qualifications that required by a brilliant career in the future, particularly in terms of professional knowledge, social communication skills and networks as well as personal characters.