Undergraduate / Common App- Reasons for Transfer (is it TMI? it's not completed or edited yet) [11]

Thank you both for getting back to me. I missed school so much because I was in and out of the hospital, put on bed rest, etc, because my heath was at serious risk. I guess the reason I included it is because it is such a big part of my life. For my senior year, I ended up living at a school for people who couldn't live at home for various reasons, and what I experienced there is so important to me and exposed me to reality. My original high school in my home town consists of mostly wealthy kids, who are handed everything from the start, and sort of follow the expected preset path to college, grad school, etc.

What I witnessed in my various placements for treatment was people of all ages and backgrounds, some who didn't have families, some who were taken from their families, and some who had heart breaking pasts. It was very eye opening, and I appreciate everything so much now and accept everyone, no matter how far from the norm they appear.

My grades at the community college I have been going to are good. My GPA is a 3.68, and my high school ones are good too. Only a few C's. SO I guess the purpose of my essay is to explain why I'm ready to begin at a four year school, not to talk my way out of a poor transcript.

However, I suppose I could just omit this all from the essay, and simply state that I would like to transfer because I'm done with community college and have maintained sufficient grades thus far. Now that I think about it, it would be much easier. : P

Undergraduate / Common App- Reasons for Transfer (is it TMI? it's not completed or edited yet) [11]

thank you very much for your feedback! The illness that I suffered with is an eating disorder, and the reason I left that out is because I feel that it is something many people don't understand to a full extent. I'm hesitant to reveal it because some people dismiss it as a shallow materialistic way of life and not a legit illness.