electricsmell
Mar 30, 2014
Scholarship / NTU Scholarship Essay: Values and Beliefs, is it okay to say something involving religion? [4]
So after changing the topic a few times and editing it a few times, here's my essay. In the end I didn't mention anything related to religion because I'm afraid it will be sensitive.. I'm still not very confident with it. Can you guys give me a feedback on my essay? Will be much appreciated!
When I was in primary one, my mother used to teach me and she was very strict about academics. My mother does not teach me anymore, but I have adopted the standards that she set on me.
Hard work and perseverance have always been the most important things in my life, especially when I want to achieve my goals. It is not easy for me and I encountered problems when keeping myself up to my own standard-one of them was when I first started doing IB, especially doing Mathematics HL. I used to have no major problem in math and I thought math was fun, but at that point, I arrived at a stage where I found that math has become a lot more challenging and difficult that it gave me frustration instead of excitement. I got below 50% for my semester one exam in grade 11; I thought I was just not that good at math, especially when my father said that my younger brother could beat me easily in math if he was diligent enough. I thought would not be able to survive Math HL, but I did not want to give up. I put a lot of effort and persevered. I did every work that was given even when some of my friends decided not to do it, and I sought help when I encountered problems.
At the end of my grade 11 year, it was proven that my hard work and perseverance did not go in vain. I managed to get the highest mark for my semester two exam. I was reassured that with hard work and perseverance, I can do anything I want. Therefore, hard work and perseverance are really of importance to me as they give me the ability to achieve my goals.
I went from values and beliefs, but when I read it again it kinda looks like the other option of the topic, which is:
"Describe, in less than 300 words, a short essay on a subject of personal importance to you. You may choose any topic. Examples include: an event which has influenced you or a family member/friend/person who had a significant influence on you."
Can anyone also tell me if this essay is more like the values and beliefs topic (the one I mentioned in the first post) of personal importance? Thank you very much!
So after changing the topic a few times and editing it a few times, here's my essay. In the end I didn't mention anything related to religion because I'm afraid it will be sensitive.. I'm still not very confident with it. Can you guys give me a feedback on my essay? Will be much appreciated!
When I was in primary one, my mother used to teach me and she was very strict about academics. My mother does not teach me anymore, but I have adopted the standards that she set on me.
Hard work and perseverance have always been the most important things in my life, especially when I want to achieve my goals. It is not easy for me and I encountered problems when keeping myself up to my own standard-one of them was when I first started doing IB, especially doing Mathematics HL. I used to have no major problem in math and I thought math was fun, but at that point, I arrived at a stage where I found that math has become a lot more challenging and difficult that it gave me frustration instead of excitement. I got below 50% for my semester one exam in grade 11; I thought I was just not that good at math, especially when my father said that my younger brother could beat me easily in math if he was diligent enough. I thought would not be able to survive Math HL, but I did not want to give up. I put a lot of effort and persevered. I did every work that was given even when some of my friends decided not to do it, and I sought help when I encountered problems.
At the end of my grade 11 year, it was proven that my hard work and perseverance did not go in vain. I managed to get the highest mark for my semester two exam. I was reassured that with hard work and perseverance, I can do anything I want. Therefore, hard work and perseverance are really of importance to me as they give me the ability to achieve my goals.
I went from values and beliefs, but when I read it again it kinda looks like the other option of the topic, which is:
"Describe, in less than 300 words, a short essay on a subject of personal importance to you. You may choose any topic. Examples include: an event which has influenced you or a family member/friend/person who had a significant influence on you."
Can anyone also tell me if this essay is more like the values and beliefs topic (the one I mentioned in the first post) of personal importance? Thank you very much!
